T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 있습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 만들기 위해 간결한 문장 구조를 사용하고, 연결어를 활용하여 논리적인 흐름을 만들어야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'If I go out, I often change my T-shirts because of sweating and humid weather. However, if I stay at home, I usually wear the same T-shirt.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: I usually wear T-shirts depending on the situation. For example, if I go outside, I change my T-shirts often because it is hot and humid. However, when I stay at home, I tend to wear the same T-shirt for comfort.

提案: 답변이 길고 문법적으로 부정확하며, 명확한 주제 문장이 부족합니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 직접 질문에 답하고, 이유를 덧붙이는 구조가 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'No, I don't often buy T-shirts because my mother buys them for me every season. She knows my preferences well.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: No, I don't buy T-shirts often because my mother buys them for me every season. She understands my style and needs, so I don't have to worry about it.

提案: 답변이 주제에서 벗어나고, 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유나 예시를 들어 설명하는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 'In my country, older people usually prefer simple and comfortable T-shirts, often in neutral colors like black or white, because they value modesty.'와 같이 말할 수 있습니다.

例: In my country, older people usually wear simple and comfortable T-shirts. They often choose neutral colors like black or white because these colors are considered modest and appropriate.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고, 자연스럽지 않은 표현이 있습니다. 간결하고 명확하게 답변하며, 이유를 덧붙이는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I wore T-shirts as a kid because they are common and comfortable clothing for everyone.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I wore T-shirts when I was a kid because they are common and comfortable clothes that everyone wears.

× If I go out, I change my T-shirts very well because sweating and humid weather.

✓ If I go out, I change my T-shirts often because of sweating and humid weather.

'Sweating' should be used as a noun here, so 'because sweating' is incorrect. The phrase should be 'because of sweating' to indicate the reason. Also, 'very well' is not appropriate in this context; 'often' fits better to express frequency.

× So.

The word 'So.' is a fragment and does not form a complete sentence. It should be removed or connected properly to the previous sentence.

× No because my mother bought me every season to adapt me so I don't worry about that because my mother know about my needs of T-shirts.

✓ No, because my mother buys me T-shirts every season to help me adapt, so I don't worry about that because my mother knows about my T-shirt needs.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect pronoun use. 'Bought' should be 'buys' to match present habitual action. 'Know' should be 'knows' for subject-verb agreement. 'Needs of T-shirts' is awkward; 'T-shirt needs' is better.

× I don't know about because I'm not interested in older people's fashion, I'm just interested in young people's fashion.

✓ I don't know because I'm not interested in older people's fashion; I'm just interested in young people's fashion.

The phrase 'know about because' is incorrect. 'Know about' requires an object, but here 'because' is a conjunction. Removing 'about' corrects the sentence.

× Actually I think all the people wear some black or white T-shirts, maybe because that is very modest T-shirts in our society.

✓ Actually, I think all the people wear black or white T-shirts, maybe because those are very modest T-shirts in our society.

'That is very modest T-shirts' is incorrect because 'that' is singular and 'T-shirts' is plural. It should be 'those are' to agree in number.

× Yes, because T-shirt is ordinary fashion items for every person.

✓ Yes, because T-shirts are ordinary fashion items for every person.

'T-shirt' is singular but 'items' is plural, causing mismatch. Both should be plural: 'T-shirts are ordinary fashion items'.

× So I I also aware that very naturally.

✓ So I am also aware of that very naturally.

The verb 'aware' requires a form of 'to be' before it, so 'I also aware' is incorrect. It should be 'I am also aware'. Also, 'aware of' is the correct prepositional phrase.