T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases such as 'easy to like carry'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep the answer concise and natural.

例: I wear T-shirts very often because they are comfortable and versatile. In fact, I even wear them during winter by layering them with jackets.

提案: Avoid filler words and repetitive phrases like 'different kind' and 'different colours'. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, I often buy T-shirts, especially those with unique patterns and vibrant colors. For example, last week I bought a blue T-shirt with floral prints.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Provide specific examples to support your opinion.

例: I believe T-shirts are quite fashionable for older people in my country because they offer a casual alternative to formal office shirts. For instance, many older men wear patterned T-shirts with dress pants to look stylish yet comfortable.

提案: Avoid redundancy like 'I was a kid, I was younger' and repeated words. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more concise.

例: Yes, I definitely wore T-shirts as a child. My mother often bought me T-shirts in my favorite colors, such as red and yellow.

× I like to buy different kind of T-shirts with different patterns and different colours.

✓ I like to buy different kinds of T-shirts with different patterns and different colours.

The phrase 'different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' because it refers to multiple types. When talking about more than one type or variety, the plural form 'kinds' is required.

× And whenever I go for shopping, I used to buy some T-shirts.

✓ And whenever I went shopping, I used to buy some T-shirts.

The phrase 'whenever I go for shopping' mixes present tense with 'used to' which indicates past habitual action. To maintain tense consistency, 'go' should be changed to past tense 'went'.

× Well I think it's a very much fashionable for older people in my country because they usually wear dress pants and office shirts and wearing T-shirt released as them differently and there are multiple designs of T-shirts and patterns which they can wear to look stylish.

✓ Well, I think it's very fashionable for older people in my country because they usually wear dress pants and office shirts, and wearing T-shirts makes them look different. There are multiple designs and patterns of T-shirts which they can wear to look stylish.

The phrase 'a very much fashionable' is incorrect; 'very fashionable' is correct without 'a' or 'much'. Also, 'wearing T-shirt released as them differently' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'wearing T-shirts makes them look different' for clarity and correctness.

× My mother used to buy T-shirts for me and I I told her to buy my favorite colours or T-shirts such as red and yellow.

✓ My mother used to buy T-shirts for me and I told her to buy my favorite colors of T-shirts such as red and yellow.

The phrase 'my favorite colours or T-shirts' is incorrect; it should be 'my favorite colors of T-shirts' to correctly link the colors to the T-shirts. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error and removed.