T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and verb forms, avoid repetition, and give one specific example. Use linking words for flow. For instance, say how often, why, and one specific activity.

例: I wear T-shirts almost every day because I enjoy outdoor activities and they keep me comfortable. For example, I usually wear T-shirts when I go camping or hiking on weekends because they are lightweight and easy to move in.

提案: Make the response more natural and correct grammar. Begin with a clear direct answer, correct expressions (e.g., "I'm really into fashion"), and avoid exaggeration unless explained. Add a brief reason and one example of when you buy.

例: Yes, I buy T-shirts fairly often because I'm really into fashion and enjoy updating my wardrobe. For example, I usually buy a new T-shirt when a brand launches a fresh design or during seasonal sales.

提案: Be concise and precise. Start with a direct statement about older people's fashion, then give specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing. Mention particular styles or examples that older people prefer.

例: From my observation, older people in Taiwan often wear fashionable T-shirts because they like to follow trends. For example, many prefer simple graphic tees or classic polo-style T-shirts that blend comfort with modern designs.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Replace unclear terms (e.g., "UMM dancing class") with clearer descriptions.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I often wore T-shirts because I took part in many outdoor activities and dance classes. For example, I attended a contemporary dance class, so T-shirts were ideal since they were comfortable and allowed me to move freely.

× Well, I would say almost every day because I'm a outdoor person, so when I wearing the T-shirts, I always can make me feel comfortable when I engage those outdoor activities such as camping or camping.

✓ Well, I would say almost every day because I'm an outdoor person, so when I wear T-shirts, they always make me feel comfortable when I engage in outdoor activities such as camping.

Errors: 'a outdoor' uses wrong article before a vowel sound; should be 'an outdoor'. 'when I wearing' is incorrect verb form and missing auxiliary; correct is 'when I wear' (present simple). 'the T-shirts' is unnecessary definite article when speaking generally; use 'T-shirts' or 'them'. 'I always can make me feel' is incorrect word order and pronoun use; correct is 'they always make me feel' or 'they always make me comfortable'. 'engage those outdoor activities' uses wrong preposition and determiner; correct is 'engage in outdoor activities'. Suggestion: use correct articles before vowel sounds, ensure subject-verb order, use base verb after time expressions for habitual actions, use 'engage in' for activities, and refer to items with appropriate pronouns or no article when speaking generally.

× Yes, exactly, because I'm a shopaholic and I also very into fashion, so when there are some new types of T-shirts, I just can't wait to buy the new one for me.

✓ Yes, exactly, because I'm a shopaholic and I'm also very into fashion, so when there are some new types of T-shirts, I just can't wait to buy a new one for myself.

Errors: 'I also very into fashion' lacks the verb 'am' (present continuous/state) and needs 'I'm also very into fashion'. 'the new one for me' uses definite article and awkward pronoun; use 'a new one for myself'. Suggestion: include the appropriate form of 'to be' for state verbs and use 'myself' for emphasis/reflexive ownership; use 'a' when referring to one of several items.

× Based on my personal observation, I would say the people live in Taiwan often get a T-shirts with many fashionable design because people they're always, uh, catch up the trends of wearing T-shirts and outfits.

✓ Based on my personal observation, I would say people who live in Taiwan often get T-shirts with many fashionable designs because they are always catching up with trends in T-shirts and outfits.

Errors: 'the people live in Taiwan' uses unnecessary definite article; use 'people who live in Taiwan' or simply 'people in Taiwan'. 'get a T-shirts' mixes singular article with plural noun; correct 'get T-shirts' or 'get a T-shirt'. 'many fashionable design' needs plural 'designs'. 'people they're always, uh, catch up the trends' has wrong clause structure and tense; use 'they are always catching up with trends'. 'catch up with' requires preposition 'with' and 'trends' needs no article when general. Suggestion: match articles to noun number, pluralize countable nouns, use relative clauses for 'people who...', and use 'catch up with' plus gerund for ongoing action.

× Yes, I did. When I was little, I usually participated in many kind of outdoor activities.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was little, I usually participated in many kinds of outdoor activities.

Errors: 'many kind of' should be 'many kinds of' (plural) when referring to multiple types. Suggestion: use plural 'kinds' and 'of' after it for correct expression.

× For example, I had attended UMM dancing class, so wearing T-shirts make me feel more comfortable and wouldn't restrict my movement.

✓ For example, I attended a UMM dancing class, so wearing T-shirts made me feel more comfortable and didn't restrict my movement.

Errors: 'I had attended' uses past perfect unnecessarily; simple past 'I attended' fits. Missing article before 'UMM dancing class' — add 'a'. 'so wearing T-shirts make me feel' has subject-verb agreement and tense errors; in past narrative use 'made me feel'. 'wouldn't restrict' is conditional; in past use 'didn't restrict'. Suggestion: use simple past for past events, ensure subject-verb agreement ('wearing T-shirts made'), and use appropriate past negative form 'didn't'.