Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“remember numbers”应为“remembering numbers”，“I always forgot”应为“I always forget”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和冗余，同时注意时态和语法的正确使用。

例: No, I'm not very good at remembering numbers because I find them difficult to memorize. For example, I often forget phone numbers even though they are important.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，语法和用词错误较多，如“service shops”应具体说明，“treat myself to use use numbers”表达不准确。建议用更准确的词汇表达观点，并且结构清晰，避免重复。

例: I don't think I will use numbers much in my future work because I work in a service shop where numbers are not very important. However, I believe learning to use numbers can help me improve my skills.

提案: 回答内容混乱且语法错误严重，表达不清楚。建议简洁明了地回答问题，使用正确的语法和词汇，避免无意义的词句。

例: Yes, I enjoyed studying math as a child because my father taught me how to use maps to find places, which made learning fun and interesting.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子结构混乱。建议直接回答问题，清晰表达重要的数字，并用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯。

例: The most important number to me is my mom's phone number because it's the only one I can remember. Also, the birth dates of my family members like my brothers, dad, mom, and grandpa are important to me.

× No, I'm not very good at remember numbers because it's quite difficult to me and I always forgot phone numbers were important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging for me and such a little puzzle.

✓ No, I'm not very good at remembering numbers because it's quite difficult for me and I always forget phone numbers are important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging and such a little puzzle.

动词短语“good at”后面应接动名词形式，因此“remember”应改为“remembering”。另外，“forgot”应改为一般现在时“forget”，因为句子描述的是习惯性动作。

× No, I'm not very good at remember numbers because it's quite difficult to me and I always forgot phone numbers were important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging for me and such a little puzzle.

✓ No, I'm not very good at remembering numbers because it's quite difficult for me and I always forget phone numbers are important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging and such a little puzzle.

“always forgot”使用了过去时，但句意表达的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“always forget”。

× No, I'm not very good at remember numbers because it's quite difficult to me and I always forgot phone numbers were important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging for me and such a little puzzle.

✓ No, I'm not very good at remembering numbers because it's quite difficult for me and I always forget phone numbers are important codes, you know, for me, it's kind of challenging and such a little puzzle.

“difficult to me”中的介词“to”用法错误，正确表达应为“difficult for me”。

× Not much I think because I do service shops so there's not things related to numbers, but I think I can treat myself to use use numbers.

✓ Not much, I think, because I work in service shops so there aren't things related to numbers, but I think I can teach myself to use numbers.

“there's not things”中“there's”是“there is”的缩写，后面应接单数名词，但“things”是复数，应改为“there aren't things”。

× Not much I think because I do service shops so there's not things related to numbers, but I think I can treat myself to use use numbers.

✓ Not much, I think, because I work in service shops so there aren't things related to numbers, but I think I can teach myself to use numbers.

“do service shops”中“do”用法不当，正确表达应为“work in service shops”，表示在某处工作。

× Not much I think because I do service shops so there's not things related to numbers, but I think I can treat myself to use use numbers.

✓ Not much, I think, because I work in service shops so there aren't things related to numbers, but I think I can teach myself to use numbers.

“treat myself to use use numbers”表达不清，正确应为“teach myself to use numbers”，表示自学使用数字。

× Yes, I really enjoy starting map when I was a child because my FA father always taught me how to use her map to locate it.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed studying math when I was a child because my father always taught me how to use his map to locate places.

“enjoy”应使用过去时“enjoyed”，因为描述的是过去的事情。“starting map”应为“studying math”。“FA father”应为“father”，且“her map”应为“his map”，指代父亲。

× Yes, I really enjoy starting map when I was a child because my FA father always taught me how to use her map to locate it.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed studying math when I was a child because my father always taught me how to use his map to locate places.

“her map”指代错误，父亲应使用“his”。

× Some places that always got they always give me details about the. Nor.

✓ Some places always gave me details about them.

原句结构混乱，缺少主谓一致和完整表达，应简化为“Some places always gave me details about them.”。

× I think the most important thing or never is my mom's number because it is the only thing only member that I can remember it and also the important is the day of their birth, my relatives, my brothers, my dad, mom and my grandpa.

✓ I think the most important number is my mom's number because it is the only number I can remember, and also important are the birthdays of my relatives: my brothers, my dad, mom, and my grandpa.

“thing or never”应为“number”。“only member”应为“only number”。“the day of their birth”应改为复数“birthdays”，与“my relatives”对应。

× I think the most important thing or never is my mom's number because it is the only thing only member that I can remember it and also the important is the day of their birth, my relatives, my brothers, my dad, mom and my grandpa.

✓ I think the most important number is my mom's number because it is the only number I can remember, and also important are the birthdays of my relatives: my brothers, my dad, mom, and my grandpa.

“remember it”中“it”多余，应去掉。

× I think the most important thing or never is my mom's number because it is the only thing only member that I can remember it and also the important is the day of their birth, my relatives, my brothers, my dad, mom and my grandpa.

✓ I think the most important number is my mom's number because it is the only number I can remember, and also important are the birthdays of my relatives: my brothers, my dad, mom, and my grandpa.

“the important is”用法错误，应为“also important are”，保持主谓一致。