Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid redundancy and ensure your examples clearly support your main point. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I'm not very good at remembering numbers, such as phone or ID card numbers. Therefore, I always carry a notebook in my bag where I write them down. This way, I can easily check any number when needed, which helps me avoid inconvenience.

提案: Good answer with relevant examples. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and vary your vocabulary slightly.

例: Yes, definitely. Since I study supply chain management, my future work will involve handling a lot of numerical data. For instance, I will need to manage figures related to package weights, destination postal codes, and customer contact information. Therefore, accurately managing these numbers is essential.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a full response with clear structure, linking words, and specific details about your experience.

例: Yes, I enjoyed studying math as a child because elementary school math was simple, involving basic addition and subtraction. However, when I reached university, the math became more challenging, which made it less enjoyable for me.

提案: Your answer starts unclearly and ends abruptly. Make sure to start directly, complete your thoughts, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Numbers that are important to me include my birthday and my phone number. My birthday is special because it marks the day I was born and is a time for celebration with family and friends. Additionally, my phone number is important as it allows people to contact me easily.

× I always carry a notebook in my bag so that I forgot a number.

✓ I always carry a notebook in my bag so that I don't forget a number.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'forgot' when referring to a habitual action in the present. The correct tense is present simple negative 'don't forget' to indicate a regular action.

× It can easily check it.

✓ I can easily check it.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject performing the action. 'It can easily check it' is incorrect because 'it' cannot check. The correct sentence uses 'I' as the subject to indicate who can check the number.

× This helps me avoid any inconvenience when I need to contact.

✓ This helps me avoid any inconvenience when I need to make contact.

The verb 'contact' requires an object or a preposition to be correct. 'Need to contact' is incomplete; 'need to make contact' or 'need to contact someone' is correct. Here, 'make contact' is used to complete the meaning.

× Yes, I enjoy the learning math when I was a child because the elementary school math is very simple, just some simple numbers plus or minus.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed learning math when I was a child because elementary school math was very simple, just some simple addition and subtraction.

The sentence mixes present tense 'enjoy' with past time 'when I was a child'. The verb should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Also, 'the learning math' is incorrect; it should be 'learning math'. 'Plus or minus' is better expressed as 'addition and subtraction'.

× But when I was in my when I was in university, I think.

✓ But when I was in university, I think...

The sentence contains a repetition 'when I was in my when I was in university' which is a structural error. Removing the repeated phrase corrects the sentence.

× Are important to you Numbers that are important to me include birthday and the phone number.

✓ Numbers that are important to me include my birthday and my phone number.

The original sentence starts with 'Are important to you' which is misplaced and causes confusion. Also, 'birthday' and 'phone number' need possessive pronouns 'my' to specify ownership.

× My birthday holds special significance because it marks the day I was born and is a time for celebration with my family and friends.

✓ My birthday holds special significance because it marks the day I was born and is a time for celebration with my family and friends.

This sentence is correct and does not require correction.

× Additionally, my phone number is crucial as it allows people.

✓ Additionally, my phone number is crucial as it allows people to contact me.

The sentence is incomplete; 'allows people' needs an infinitive verb phrase to complete the meaning. Adding 'to contact me' clarifies the purpose of the phone number.