Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add a clear supporting detail using linking words. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

例: I'm not very good at remembering numbers, but in urgent situations like exams, I try my best to remember them efficiently.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Definitely, I will use numbers in my future work because they are essential for tasks like calculating costs and managing accounts.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: Yes, I enjoyed studying math as a child because it was easy for me, and I did well in school. However, as I grew older, math became more difficult, so I lost interest.

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks fluency and contains filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain your reason with specific details, avoiding unnecessary pauses.

例: The number 7 is important to me because it is considered lucky, and its pronunciation in Chinese sounds similar to my name.

× Not really, I'm not very good at remembering number, but in the urgent situation like during the like during the exam I might.

✓ Not really, I'm not very good at remembering numbers, but in urgent situations like during the exam I might.

The word 'number' should be plural 'numbers' because it refers to multiple numbers in general. Also, 'the urgent situation' should be plural 'urgent situations' to indicate general cases, and the repeated phrase 'like during the' is redundant and removed for clarity.

× if efficient is better effect.

✓ if efficiency has a better effect.

The word 'efficient' is an adjective, but here a noun 'efficiency' is needed to correctly express the idea. Also, 'better effect' needs a verb to connect properly, so 'has' is added.

× Definitely, yes. Number is uh, quite important things in life.

✓ Definitely, yes. Numbers are quite important things in life.

'Number' should be plural 'Numbers' to refer to numbers in general. Also, 'is' should be changed to 'are' to agree with the plural subject.

× So you can use the number or map everywhere, such as you may account the account, the cost.

✓ So you can use numbers or maps everywhere, such as when you account for the cost.

'Number' and 'map' should be plural 'numbers' and 'maps' to indicate general usage. The phrase 'you may account the account' is incorrect; it should be 'you account for the cost' to express the intended meaning.

× Yes, because when I was child, the math is not difficult and I got a high high school and it let me it helps me establish the confidence that when I grew up, the map is become very, very, very difficult.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child, math was not difficult and I got high marks in high school and it helped me establish confidence, but when I grew up, math became very, very, very difficult.

'When I was child' needs the article 'a' before 'child'. 'The math' should be 'math' without 'the'. 'I got a high high school' is incorrect; it should be 'I got high marks in high school'. 'It let me it helps me' is redundant; 'it helped me' is correct. 'The map is become' should be 'math became' to use correct past tense and spelling.

× Uh, I think the number 7 is important to me because umm 7 is very great number and the pronunciation of seven in Chi Chinese is like mine.

✓ Uh, I think the number 7 is important to me because 7 is a very great number and the pronunciation of seven in Chinese is like my name.

'Very great number' needs the article 'a' before 'very great number'. 'Chi Chinese' is incorrect; it should be 'Chinese'. 'Like mine' is unclear; 'like my name' is the intended meaning.