Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more coherent by organizing your ideas logically and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and provide specific examples to support your points. Also, keep your sentences concise and avoid filler words.

例: Honestly, I am not very good at remembering numbers because I did not enjoy math when I was in school. However, I can usually remember numbers related to calculations, such as prices or phone numbers, especially when I use them frequently.

提案: Improve your answer by structuring it clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your response more coherent and avoid repetition. Be specific about how you use numbers in your work and how you expect to use them in the future.

例: Yes, I use numbers regularly in my current job, especially when calculating medication dosages for patients. Therefore, I believe that numbers will continue to be important in my future work as well.

提案: Focus on making your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid contradictory statements without explanation and try to express your feelings clearly.

例: I did not enjoy studying math as a child because I found it difficult to understand. However, I was interested in topics like algebra and calculus, even though they were challenging for me.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and organized by using proper sentence structure and linking words. Be specific about why these numbers are important to you and avoid hesitation sounds. Keep your answer concise and clear.

例: The numbers that are important to me include the birthdays of my children and myself, as well as the dates when I passed important examinations. These numbers hold special meaning because they mark significant moments in my life.

× Honestly not really because I do not love math subject at all when I was still at school back then.

✓ Honestly not really because I do not love the math subject at all when I was still at school back then.

In English, when referring to a specific subject like 'math,' the definite article 'the' is usually required before 'math subject' to specify it clearly.

× However, I in terms of computing numbers something like that, I usually remember it but not good of it.

✓ However, in terms of computing numbers or something like that, I usually remember them but I am not good at it.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'I in terms of' is incorrect; it should be 'in terms of'. Also, 'not good of it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not good at it'. Additionally, 'numbers' is plural, so 'it' should be 'them'.

× Well at my work today we usually use numbers like computing medications for patients so I encounter it every now and then.

✓ Well, at my work today we usually use numbers, like computing medications for patients, so I encounter them every now and then.

The sentence needs commas for clarity. Also, 'it' refers to 'numbers' which is plural, so it should be 'them'. This is related to pronoun usage but mainly affects clarity and correctness.

× So I I think it will be used until in my future.

✓ So I think it will be used in my future work.

The phrase 'until in my future' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'in my future' or 'in my future work'. Also, removing the repeated 'I' improves clarity.

× Honestly not really because I do not love math subject at all, but I find it interestingly especially with countings like algebra, calculus so but I can't understand it honestly.

✓ Honestly not really because I do not love the math subject at all, but I find it interesting, especially with counting like algebra and calculus, but I can't understand it honestly.

Again, 'the' is needed before 'math subject'. 'Countings' is incorrect; the correct form is 'counting'. Also, 'interestingly' is an adverb and should be 'interesting' as an adjective here. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions properly.

× Well, the numbers that are very important to me is, are the numbers of the birthday of my children and of course my birthday and also on when I pass my examinations because that's the real, uh, numbers that I believe it's.

✓ Well, the numbers that are very important to me are the dates of my children's birthdays, of course my birthday, and also when I pass my examinations because those are the real numbers that I believe in.

The subject 'numbers' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Numbers of the birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'dates of my children's birthdays'. Also, 'it's' is incorrect here; it should be 'those are' to agree with the plural subject. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.