Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid long hesitations and unrelated metaphors, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words to show contrast when discussing past vs present (e.g., "but", "however"). Replace unclear metaphors with simple descriptions (e.g., "my memory was much better").

例: Yes, I used to be good at remembering numbers, but recently stress has made it harder for me. A couple of years ago I could memorize phone numbers and codes very easily. However, now I often forget them unless I write them down.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and follow with specific supporting details. Reduce fillers ("uh") and repetitive wording. Use linking words to organise info (e.g., "because", "so"). Mention concrete examples of how numbers are used to show precision and relevance.

例: Yes, I will. I have worked as a nurse for 15 years, so I regularly use numbers to calculate medication dosages and record patients' vital signs. For example, I often calculate the correct milligram dose based on a patient's weight.

提案: Answer directly (Yes/No + reason) and give a specific example rather than vague complaints. Avoid excessive hesitations and imprecise phrases like "by my heart" (say "by heart"). Use one linking word to add a detail (e.g., "because", "for example").

例: No, I did not enjoy math as a child because it required memorizing many formulas and doing long calculations. For example, I found chemistry problems involving moles and conversions especially difficult and boring.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the important numbers, then explain why each matters with specific cultural details. Avoid pauses and unclear words (e.g., "miss and traditions" unclear—say "my country's traditions"). Keep to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "also" or "for example".

例: The number seven is important to me because it is widely seen as lucky in my culture and appears in many traditions. Also, the number twenty was significant in Iran because schools often used a 20-point grading scale, so students paid attention to it.

× Nowadays us have to tolerate lots of stress.

✓ Nowadays we have to tolerate a lot of stress.

'Us' is an object pronoun and cannot be the subject of a sentence; use the subject pronoun 'we'. Also 'lots of' is informal; 'a lot of' is more appropriate here.

× So I have a memory like a ship, Uh, but I remember that a couple of years ago, I remember the and I could memorize a lot of numbers.

✓ So my memory is poor now, but I remember that a couple of years ago I could memorize a lot of numbers.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('I remember' twice) and contains an irrelevant phrase 'like a ship'. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb structure: 'my memory is poor now, but I remember that a couple of years ago I could...' removes redundancy and corrects sentence flow.

× It was really, uh, easy for me.

✓ It was really easy for me.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; removing filler 'uh' makes it fluent. The past tense 'was' correctly matches the time reference 'a couple of years ago'.

× And on that time I had a memory like an elephant.

✓ At that time I had a memory like an elephant.

'On that time' is incorrect; use the preposition 'at' with 'that time' to indicate a point in time.

× Since my major was nursing, I've been working as a nurse for 15 years.

✓ My major was nursing, and I worked as a nurse for 15 years.

'Since' followed by a past-tense clause is confusing here. If the speaker means they have been a nurse for 15 years until now, use 'I have been a nurse for 15 years.' If they mean a completed 15-year period, use past simple 'I worked as a nurse for 15 years.' Choose based on intended meaning; here earlier context implies past continuous career, so past simple is clearer.

× Nowadays I immigrated to London and I'm uh look for a new job.

✓ Recently I immigrated to London and I'm looking for a new job.

'Nowadays' with 'immigrated' is awkward; 'recently' matches the past action. The verb phrase 'I'm look for' is incorrect; use the present continuous 'I'm looking for' to describe current action.

× Uh in uh nursing we have to use a lot of numbers to uh administrate the medication with different doses.

✓ In nursing we have to use a lot of numbers to administer medication at different doses.

'Administrate' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'administer'. Use 'medication' without 'the' for general reference, and 'at different doses' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Uh, when I was a child, I really didn't like studying math because it was really awful for a child to remember lots of numbers and we had to calculate for moles and, uh, do long calculation.

✓ When I was a child, I really didn't like studying math because it was hard to remember many numbers and we had to calculate for months and do long calculations.

The sentence has errors: 'awful for a child' is awkward—'hard' fits better. 'lots of numbers' -> 'many numbers'. 'calculate for moles' seems to be a mispronunciation: likely 'months' or 'moles' is wrong; if intended 'months' use that. 'do long calculation' should be plural 'do long calculations'.

× Umm, uh, I didn't like it because I had to, uh, memorize it by my heart.

✓ I didn't like it because I had to memorize it by heart.

The idiom is 'by heart' not 'by my heart'. Remove filler words and use the correct phrase.

× Many people around the world, uh, consider 7 and as a lucky number, and I feel the same because it appears often in miss and traditions.

✓ Many people around the world consider 7 a lucky number, and I feel the same because it appears often in myths and traditions.

Remove extraneous 'and' after '7'. 'Miss' is incorrect; the intended word is 'myths'. Also remove filler 'uh' and reorder 'consider 7 a lucky number' for correct adjective placement.

× Another number that was important to children in Iranian cities was 20 and since many school used, uh, 20 points grading a scale.

✓ Another number that was important to children in Iranian cities was 20, since many schools used a 20-point grading scale.

Use plural 'schools'. '20 points grading a scale' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'a 20-point grading scale'. Add commas for clarity and remove filler 'uh'.