News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and shows interest, but there are some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am very interested in the news because it provides important updates about current events. Additionally, it helps me stay informed about what is happening both in my country and around the world.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct prepositions and plural forms, and try to combine sentences using linking words for better flow.

例: I usually get news from various sources. For example, I read magazines and newspapers, and sometimes I also read news online.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward expressions. Avoid using 'although' and 'but' together, and improve sentence structure. Also, provide clearer reasons for your choice.

例: Although being a journalist is a good job with a handsome salary, I would not like to be one because my career goals are different. I want to work as a business analyst in a multinational company.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Use past tense consistently and avoid sentence fragments. Also, try to link your reasons clearly.

例: No, I did not read the news this morning because I was feeling sick and was late for school, so I didn't have time to read it.

提案: Your answer shows engagement but has grammatical errors, filler words, and awkward phrasing. Avoid fillers like 'uh', use correct singular/plural forms, and structure your sentences clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I often talk with my friends about the news because one of them is a journalist. We discuss what is happening in our country and around the world, which I find very interesting and enjoyable.

× Although it is very good job and receiving handsome salary, but I would not like to be a journalist becaused my career option is well different from journalist.

✓ Although it is a very good job and offers a handsome salary, I would not like to be a journalist because my career option is quite different from journalism.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'Although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. Also, 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. The phrase 'well different from journalist' is awkward; 'quite different from journalism' is more appropriate. The article 'a' is missing before 'very good job'. The verb 'receiving' should be replaced with 'offers' to correctly express the job's attribute.

× Moreover, sometime I read news from the online.

✓ Moreover, sometimes I read news online.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'The online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb here and does not need 'the'. The phrase 'read news from the online' is ungrammatical; it should be 'read news online'.

× I usually find news from various ways, for example.

✓ I usually find news in various ways, for example.

The phrase 'from various ways' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for 'ways'. Also, 'ways' is plural and correctly used here. The sentence ends abruptly with 'for example.' which should be followed by examples or rephrased.

× No, I did not read the news this morning becaused today I feel sick and.

✓ No, I did not read the news this morning because I felt sick today.

'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly: 'did not read' is past, so 'feel' should be 'felt' to maintain past tense consistency. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incomplete and should be removed.

× I was late from my school that's why I did not read it.

✓ I was late for my school; that's why I did not read it.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'for' when indicating being late to a place. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be separated with a semicolon or period.

× Definitely, I usually talk with my friends about the news becauses one of my friend is a journalist and uh, I usually talk with. Him about the what is happening in our country and around the world and it is very interesting and I feel. So good.

✓ Definitely, I usually talk with my friends about the news because one of my friends is a journalist, and I usually talk with him about what is happening in our country and around the world. It is very interesting, and I feel so good.

'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' to match plural 'friends'. The pronoun 'Him' should not be capitalized and should not be preceded by a period. The phrase 'the what is happening' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed. The sentence is fragmented and run-on; it needs proper punctuation and conjunctions to improve clarity.