News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est claire et pertinente, mais vous pouvez améliorer la fluidité en évitant les répétitions et en utilisant des mots de liaison pour mieux structurer votre réponse.

例: Yes, I'm very interested in news because it helps me understand the world better. For instance, updates on technology and politics often influence our daily lives, so staying informed is essential.

提案: Essayez d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus cohérente et évitez les erreurs grammaticales pour améliorer la clarté.

例: I usually get my news from newspapers, but I also enjoy watching video summaries that highlight the main events happening around the world.

提案: Faites attention à la grammaire et à la formulation des phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour organiser vos idées et évitez les erreurs de vocabulaire.

例: I wouldn't like to be a journalist for several reasons. Firstly, I don't consider myself a good writer and find it hard to clearly describe what I see. Moreover, I believe it's a dangerous job, which discourages me from pursuing it.

提案: Améliorez la structure de vos phrases et utilisez des expressions plus naturelles pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et cohérente.

例: I didn't read the news this morning because I was late for an appointment. Usually, I like to catch up on the news early to stay informed about current events, so missing it today was unusual for me.

提案: Travaillez sur la clarté et la grammaire de vos phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour mieux connecter vos idées et évitez les répétitions inutiles.

例: Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends, especially topics like politics and technology, because these subjects encourage us to share different perspectives.

× news about technology or politics can affect the daily life

✓ news about technology or politics can affect daily life

The phrase 'the daily life' is incorrect here because 'daily life' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the'. Removing 'the' makes the phrase grammatically correct.

× I usually find news on papers

✓ I usually find news in newspapers

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to newspapers; the correct preposition is 'in'. Also, 'papers' is informal and ambiguous; 'newspapers' is more precise.

× I also like to watch news on videos

✓ I also like to watch news videos

The phrase 'watch news on videos' is awkward. It is better to say 'watch news videos' to indicate the format clearly without unnecessary prepositions.

× I think that is really a dangerous jobs

✓ I think that it is really a dangerous job

The noun 'jobs' is plural but preceded by the singular article 'a', which is incorrect. Also, the subject 'that' needs the pronoun 'it' for clarity. The correct form is singular 'job' with 'a'.

× missing in today was quite unusual for me

✓ missing today was quite unusual for me

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. The phrase should be 'missing today' to correctly express the idea in past tense.

× News Yes, I often talk with my friends about the news, especially with the politics and technology

✓ Yes, I often talk with my friends about the news, especially about politics and technology

The word 'News' at the beginning is misplaced and should be removed. Also, 'with the politics and technology' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about' and no definite article is needed before 'politics' and 'technology'.

× because I think that these topics really need to talk because it can be a way to have different perspective

✓ because I think that these topics really need to be talked about as they can be a way to have different perspectives

The phrase 'need to talk' is incorrect; it should be 'need to be talked about'. Also, 'because' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' to match the context.