News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is detailed and shows good vocabulary, but it is slightly long and could be more concise. Try to keep your response within 4-5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am very interested in news because I believe staying informed is important. My father used to buy newspapers every morning, which encouraged me to read regularly. Nowadays, I follow several online news channels on social media to keep up with current events.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to use simpler sentence structures and clear linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: I usually get news from television and online sources because they are convenient. For example, I watch news during meals, which allows me to learn about politics, economics, and sports all at once, saving time.

提案: Your answer is clear and informative but could be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and avoiding overly complex sentences. Try to connect your reasons with linking words for better flow.

例: No, I don't want to be a journalist because I am not interested in writing or researching news. Moreover, journalism in Hong Kong has become more difficult recently due to the National Security Law, which requires people to be very careful with their words.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammar mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid repeating phrases, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I was busy. However, I plan to read it after the exam. I use an AI app called Perplexity that sends me important news about Hong Kong daily, so I can stay updated whenever I have time.

提案: Your answer covers the topic but lacks smooth linking and has some grammar errors. Try to connect your sentences with linking words and use complete sentences for clarity.

例: I often talk about the news with my friends when important events happen. For example, during COVID-19 and the Hong Kong protests, we discussed the news almost every day. We usually talk about news that affects us or is interesting, showing that we care about our city and the world.

× In addition to reading newspapers in a traditional manner which can offer results in instance on our hands are now primarily obtain news from television or online sources.

✓ In addition to reading newspapers in a traditional manner, which can offer instant results in our hands, we now primarily obtain news from television or online sources.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and has incorrect word order, making it confusing. Adding commas and rearranging words clarifies the meaning and improves readability.

× I find it considerably more convenient to explore various news topics on television during meal times.

✓ I find it considerably more convenient to watch various news topics on television during meal times.

The verb 'explore' is less appropriate here; 'watch' fits better with 'television'. This improves the naturalness of the sentence.

× For instance, I can simultaneously learn about politics, economics and sports, which saves my time.

✓ For instance, I can simultaneously learn about politics, economics, and sports, which saves me time.

The phrase 'saves my time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'saves me time'. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity.

× No, I don't have time to read the news this morning yet, but I will do it after taking this exam thanks to the help with AI these dates.

✓ No, I didn't have time to read the news this morning yet, but I will do it after taking this exam thanks to the help of AI these days.

The sentence refers to a past time ('this morning'), so past tense 'didn't have' is appropriate. Also, 'these dates' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'these days'.

× I'm using an AI app called Perplexity which sends me a few important news happened in Hong Kong every day, so I can check the news every day when I have time and I can only need and I only need to.

✓ I'm using an AI app called Perplexity which sends me a few important news items that happened in Hong Kong every day, so I can check the news whenever I have time and only when I need to.

The original sentence is confusing and repetitive. Adding 'items' after 'news' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I will talk about the news with my friends when there are some significant things happen.

✓ I will talk about the news with my friends when some significant things happen.

The phrase 'when there are some significant things happen' is incorrect. Removing 'there are' and using 'when some significant things happen' is grammatically correct.

× During those periods of time, we nearly talked about these on a daily basis.

✓ During those periods of time, we nearly talked about these daily.

The phrase 'on a daily basis' is wordy; 'daily' is more concise and natural. The past tense 'talked' is correct here.

× Usually when we discuss some news which is closely related to us or particularly humorous.

✓ Usually, we discuss news that is closely related to us or particularly humorous.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a main verb. Rewriting it as a complete sentence corrects the structure.