News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は少し冗長で文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、簡潔に主題文を述べ、その後に具体的な理由を述べる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I'm very interested in news because it provides me with important information about current events and helps me understand society better.

提案: 回答は内容が明確ですが、文のつながりがやや単調です。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。

例: I usually find news online by using my smartphone and social media, but sometimes I also check the newspaper. Mainly, I rely on my laptop or smartphone to stay updated.

提案: 理由を述べる際に文法の誤りがあり、表現が少し不自然です。理由を明確にし、接続詞を使って論理的に話す練習をしましょう。

例: I'm not very interested in becoming a journalist because I think it's a challenging and dangerous job that requires going out to gather information. I really respect journalists for their hard work.

提案: 内容が少し混乱しており、文法的な誤りもあります。具体的な情報を正確に伝え、感想を述べる際は適切な形容詞を使う練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I read the news this morning. There was a car accident in Osaka yesterday where two people were killed. It was shocking and caught my attention.

提案: 文が長くなりすぎて意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔に話し、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I often talk with my friends about the news because I want to hear their opinions. When we meet, we sometimes discuss recent events in society, which I find very inspiring.

× That's because I, if I see news, the news is going to give me a lot of information about and I also I can gain the knowledge about what's happening in current society.

✓ That's because if I see news, the news is going to give me a lot of information and I can also gain knowledge about what's happening in current society.

The phrase 'about and I also I can gain' is incorrect because 'about' is left hanging without an object and the sentence structure is awkward. Removing 'about' after 'information' and repositioning 'also' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually search News Online.

✓ I usually search for news online.

The verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by the object. Also, 'news' should not be capitalized and 'online' should be lowercase as it is an adverb here.

× I use smartphone and social media to look for any news and also I check the newspaper sometimes.

✓ I use a smartphone and social media to look for any news, and I also check the newspaper sometimes.

The noun 'smartphone' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× But I mainly use a laptop or smartphone for searching.

✓ But I mainly use a laptop or a smartphone for searching.

The noun 'smartphone' requires the indefinite article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× That's because in my image the journalist is really challenging and a tough job because they need to go out even and there is really dangerous and they need to gather information.

✓ That's because in my view, being a journalist is really challenging and a tough job because they need to go out even in dangerous situations and gather information.

The phrase 'in my image' is incorrect; 'in my view' or 'in my opinion' is appropriate. Also, 'there is really dangerous' is incorrect; it should be 'in dangerous situations'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× The latest news I've checked is that the accident which happened yesterday in Osaka, it was a car accident and two people murdered.

✓ The latest news I've checked is that the accident which happened yesterday in Osaka was a car accident and two people were murdered.

The phrase 'two people murdered' lacks the auxiliary verb 'were' to form the passive voice in past tense. Also, removing the unnecessary comma and 'it' improves sentence flow.

× It was surprising and I was really interesting.

✓ It was surprising and I was really interested.

The adjective 'interesting' describes something that causes interest, while 'interested' describes a feeling. Since the speaker is describing their feeling, 'interested' is correct.

× So when I get my I and my friend get back, we sometimes chat about the latest news and what's happened in the society and I think that's really inspiring opportunity for me.

✓ So when I get back and my friend gets back, we sometimes chat about the latest news and what's happened in society, and I think that's a really inspiring opportunity for me.

The phrase 'I get my I' is incorrect and likely a typo; corrected to 'I get back'. Also, 'my friend get back' should be 'my friend gets back' for subject-verb agreement. 'In the society' should be 'in society' without 'the'. Adding 'a' before 'really inspiring opportunity' is necessary for grammatical correctness.