News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but has some redundancy and minor grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "Yes, I enjoy listening to the news because it is a primary source of information. It teaches me about the world and the entertainment industry, so I like to stay informed."

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to the news because it is a primary source of information. It teaches me about the world and the entertainment industry, so I like to stay informed.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words like "however" or "but". Also, avoid vague phrases and be more specific. For example, "I usually find news interesting; however, some news nowadays focuses more on attracting viewers for profit rather than providing useful information."

例: I usually find news interesting; however, some news nowadays focuses more on attracting viewers for profit rather than providing useful information.

提案: Your answer has several unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. For example, instead of "it is a huge tax," say "it is a huge responsibility." Also, use linking words to connect your points. For example, "I would not like to be a journalist because it is a huge responsibility not only to the TV channel but also to the nation. Additionally, journalists often have to work in risky areas, which I am not comfortable with."

例: I would not like to be a journalist because it is a huge responsibility not only to the TV channel but also to the nation. Additionally, journalists often have to work in risky areas, which I am not comfortable with.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use complete sentences and organize your ideas logically. For example, "Yes, I read the news every morning. I usually start by reading the newspaper and then watch the news on TV. I prefer entertainment and sports news, and today I learned about the Premier League standings."

例: Yes, I read the news every morning. I usually start by reading the newspaper and then watch the news on TV. I prefer entertainment and sports news, and today I learned about the Premier League standings.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your points. For example, "Yes, we often talk about the news when we meet because it gives us topics to share and discuss. Although we may have different perspectives, it helps us understand each other better."

例: Yes, we often talk about the news when we meet because it gives us topics to share and discuss. Although we may have different perspectives, it helps us understand each other better.

× I think the news are primary source of information.

✓ I think the news is a primary source of information.

The word 'news' is singular and uncountable, so it should be treated as singular. Also, 'source' is singular and needs the article 'a'. Therefore, 'news is a primary source' is correct.

× So some of the news nowadays is not informative.

✓ So some of the news nowadays are not informative.

When referring to 'some of the news' as multiple items or reports, 'news' can be treated as plural. Here, 'are' is appropriate to indicate plural. However, 'news' is generally uncountable, so this is a borderline case; contextually, plural verb is acceptable.

× They tend to just make the news for the sake of the TRP, for the sake of their profit.

✓ They tend to just make the news for the sake of TRP, for the sake of their profit.

'TRP' is an acronym and does not need 'the' before it. Removing 'the' before 'TRP' is correct usage.

× I just love to listen to it.

✓ I just love to listen to them.

Since 'news' is treated as plural in this context (multiple news items), the pronoun should be plural 'them' instead of singular 'it'.

× I find them interesting, so sometime it might not be as informative as it should be.

✓ I find them interesting, so sometimes they might not be as informative as they should be.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'news' or 'them'.

× But usually I enjoy the news if they are.

✓ But usually I enjoy the news if it is good.

'News' is singular and uncountable, so the pronoun should be 'it' not 'they'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'good' clarifies meaning.

× It was all the individuals of the country.

✓ It was all the individuals in the country.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate location or belonging.

× being a journalist is like you have to go into the risky area and I think I'm not.

✓ Being a journalist means you have to go into risky areas and I think I'm not willing to.

The phrase 'like you have to' is incorrect; 'means you have to' is better. Also, 'risky area' should be plural 'risky areas'. The sentence ending 'I think I'm not' is incomplete; adding 'willing to' completes the thought.

× So I don't think I will be capable of doing that.

✓ So I don't think I am capable of doing that.

The modal 'will be' suggests future capability, but the speaker is expressing current ability or confidence, so 'am capable' is more appropriate.

× It's absolutely.

✓ Absolutely.

'It's absolutely' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct response is simply 'Absolutely' as an affirmative answer.

× I just wake up and I take the newspaper as well as open the TV and just take some news.

✓ I just wake up and take the newspaper as well as turn on the TV and watch some news.

'Open the TV' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'turn on the TV'. Also, 'take some news' is unnatural; 'watch some news' is better.

× But mostly I love entertainment news, the Sports News.

✓ But mostly I love entertainment news and sports news.

'Sports News' should not be capitalized and should be connected with 'and' instead of a comma for clarity.

× Today I learned about the Premier League and the table.

✓ Today I learned about the Premier League and the standings table.

Adding 'standings' clarifies the meaning of 'table' as a sports ranking table.

× Yes, we often talk about the news whenever we meet because I think being for the communication with through the news is one of those source of creating a communication because whenever we talk about the news, we have something to talk about just to share, to communicate.

✓ Yes, we often talk about the news whenever we meet because I think using the news for communication is one of the sources of creating communication since whenever we talk about the news, we have something to share and discuss.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Being for the communication with through the news' is incorrect; 'using the news for communication' is correct. Also, 'one of those source' should be 'one of the sources'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× And maybe we will have a different perspective, but eventually we'll know.

✓ And maybe we will have different perspectives, but eventually we'll understand each other.

'Perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' because multiple people have different views. 'We'll know' is vague; 'we'll understand each other' is clearer.