News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repeating similar words like 'engaging' and 'captivating'. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I am very interested in news because they provide important information. For example, yesterday I watched a political news report which I found very fascinating. I enjoy keeping up with current events.

提案: Your answer shows good opinion but some sentences are a bit unclear and have grammatical mistakes. Use correct verb forms and try to link your ideas smoothly with words like 'however' or 'but'.

例: Nowadays, many news reports seem subjective and sometimes biased. However, I prefer news that is objective and reflects the true situation in society.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use complete sentences. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and explain your reasons logically.

例: I would not like to be a journalist because it is a difficult and dangerous job. Journalists often have to visit risky places like war zones or areas affected by terrorism, which can be very unsafe.

提案: Your answer is good and detailed but contains some awkward phrasing and minor grammar mistakes. Try to use natural expressions and correct verb forms, for example, 'I usually read the news with my coffee' and 'Manchester United won the Premier League match today'.

例: Yes, I always read the news in the morning while having my coffee. I usually start with political news and then check the sports section. For example, today I read that Manchester United won their Premier League match.

提案: Your answer is relevant but some sentences are awkward and repetitive. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, and link your ideas with words like 'for example' or 'such as'.

例: I often talk with my friends about the latest news, including entertainment, sports, and politics. For example, when we meet, we discuss current political events and recent sports news.

× I am engaged in news because they provide the information that are very engaging as well as in captivating.

✓ I am engaged in news because they provide information that is very engaging as well as captivating.

The phrase 'in captivating' is incorrect; 'captivating' should be used as an adjective without the preposition 'in'. Also, 'information' is uncountable and singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'.

× I am engaged in news because they provide the information that are very engaging as well as in captivating.

✓ I am engaged in news because they provide information that is very engaging as well as captivating.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'the information' can be simplified to 'information' for natural usage.

× Just yesterday I saw news which was based on political agenda and I found it very enthralling.

✓ Just yesterday I saw news which was based on a political agenda and I found it very enthralling.

'Political agenda' is countable and singular here, so it needs the article 'a' before it.

× I think most of the news are subjective nowadays and I feel that they are not so much thought provoking and they might get biased sometime.

✓ I think most of the news is subjective nowadays and I feel that it is not so thought-provoking and it might get biased sometimes.

'News' is an uncountable singular noun, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'thought provoking' should be hyphenated as 'thought-provoking' when used as an adjective. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× But I really enjoy the news that are more objective and that depicts the reality of the society.

✓ But I really enjoy the news that is more objective and that depicts the reality of society.

'News' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'the society' is incorrect here; 'society' is used without 'the' when speaking generally.

× I think the job, the journalist is very hard.

✓ I think the job of a journalist is very hard.

The phrase 'the job, the journalist' is incorrect. It should be 'the job of a journalist' to correctly express the meaning.

× You have to go to the places.

✓ You have to go to places.

'The places' is too vague and unnecessary here; 'places' without 'the' is more natural in this context.

× So which is very dangerous.

✓ Which is very dangerous.

The sentence fragment 'So which is very dangerous.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected properly or rephrased. However, since it is a fragment, it is better to remove 'So' and keep 'Which is very dangerous.' or combine with previous sentence.

× For example, the journalists are often covering the news of the reason that the terrorist operate or which is the reason that actually is the war zone.

✓ For example, journalists often cover news about the reasons terrorists operate or areas that are actually war zones.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'The news of the reason that the terrorist operate' is incorrect; it should be 'news about the reasons terrorists operate'. Also, 'which is the reason that actually is the war zone' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'areas that are actually war zones'.

× So it is very dangerous and I think I am.

✓ So it is very dangerous and I think I am not suited for it.

The sentence 'I think I am.' is incomplete and unclear. It needs completion to express the intended meaning.

× That's absolutely.

✓ Absolutely.

'That's absolutely.' is incorrect because 'absolutely' is an adverb and needs to modify a verb or adjective. Simply saying 'Absolutely.' is more natural.

× The first thing that I mostly read after the first page is the Sports News.

✓ The first thing that I mostly read after the first page is the sports news.

'Sports news' is uncountable and should not be capitalized or pluralized as 'Sports News'.

× I get to be aware of the sports that is happening.

✓ I get to be aware of the sports that are happening.

'Sports' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× Just today I saw the Manchester United won the Premier League match.

✓ Just today I saw that Manchester United won the Premier League match.

The sentence needs 'that' to introduce the clause. Also, 'the Manchester United' is incorrect; 'Manchester United' is a proper noun and does not need 'the'.

× I think it is the best way to communicate with a friend is to talk about the latest news, whether it is the entertainment news or maybe the sports or any political news.

✓ I think the best way to communicate with a friend is to talk about the latest news, whether it is entertainment news, sports, or any political news.

'The best way' does not need 'it is' after 'think'. Also, 'the entertainment news' and 'the sports' should be 'entertainment news' and 'sports' without 'the'.

× We tend to do the same.

✓ We tend to do the same thing.

'Do the same' is incomplete; it should be 'do the same thing' to be grammatically correct.

× So whenever we meet, we talk about the political agenda and what's happening in the international.

✓ So whenever we meet, we talk about the political agenda and what's happening internationally.

'In the international' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'internationally'.

× So for example, we talked about the Sports News too.

✓ So for example, we talked about sports news too.

'Sports news' is uncountable and should not be capitalized or pluralized as 'Sports News'.