News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณดีมากแล้ว แต่ควรปรับให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้นโดยใช้สำนวนที่ลื่นไหลและลดความซ้ำซ้อน เช่น ใช้คำว่า "keep up with" แทน "keep being up with" และเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

例: Yes, I am quite interested in keeping up with current events around the world because they directly impact my daily life. For example, I often follow economic news so that I can plan my finances effectively.

提案: คำตอบของคุณชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างดี แต่ควรเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างลื่นไหล เช่น การใช้ "but" หรือ "however" อย่างเหมาะสม

例: I usually stay informed by checking social media because it is convenient, but when I want to learn more deeply about a specific topic, I prefer to use online platforms.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจน เช่น ใช้ "fields" แทน "field" และปรับประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

例: No, I don't want to be a journalist because I am not passionate about investigating the truth or reporting it to the public. Moreover, I am more interested in other fields such as technology and science.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และความไม่ชัดเจน ควรปรับประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "I saw the latest news on social media this morning while waiting for the train. It was about the release of a new version of a famous smartphone."

例: Yes, I saw the latest news on social media this morning while waiting for the train. It was about the release of a new version of a famous smartphone.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีความยาวเกินไปและมีความซ้ำซ้อน ควรย่อให้กระชับและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงแก้คำว่า "training topics" ที่อาจไม่ตรงกับบริบทเป็น "trending topics"

例: Yes, almost every evening, I not only play games with my friends but also discuss trending topics and share our perspectives. We enjoy talking about current news because it helps us stay informed and understand different opinions.

× Yes, I am quite interested to keep being up with current events around the world because they can directly impact my daily life.

✓ Yes, I am quite interested in keeping up with current events around the world because they can directly impact my daily life.

The phrase 'interested in' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form) rather than an infinitive. Therefore, 'interested to keep being up' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in keeping up'.

× No, I don't want to be a journalist because I am not passionate about investigating the truth or reporting them to the public.

✓ No, I don't want to be a journalist because I am not passionate about investigating the truth or reporting it to the public.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it refers to a plural noun, but 'the truth' is singular. The correct pronoun is 'it'.

× Also I am more interested in other field which is technology and science.

✓ Also, I am more interested in other fields which are technology and science.

The word 'field' should be plural 'fields' because it refers to multiple areas (technology and science). Also, the verb should agree in number: 'which are' instead of 'which is'.

× Yes, I have left the latest news on social media.

✓ Yes, I have read the latest news on social media.

The verb 'left' is incorrect in this context. The correct verb is 'read' (past participle) to indicate that the news was consumed or seen.

× In this morning while I was watching for the train.

✓ This morning, while I was waiting for the train,

The phrase 'In this morning' is incorrect; it should be 'This morning'. Also, 'watching for the train' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'waiting for the train'. The sentence is incomplete and should be connected properly.

× It was about releasing the new version of smartphone which is the famous.

✓ It was about the release of the new version of the smartphone which is famous.

The phrase 'releasing the new version' should be 'the release of the new version'. Also, 'the famous' is incorrect; it should be 'which is famous' or 'which is well-known'.

× Yes, almost every evening I usually not only play games with my friends but also discuss training topics and share our perspective together.

✓ Yes, almost every evening I usually not only play games with my friends but also discuss trending topics and share our perspectives together.

The word 'training' is incorrect; the intended word is 'trending' (popular topics). Also, 'perspective' should be plural 'perspectives' when referring to multiple opinions.