News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, ensure correct word order and article usage.

例: Yes, I am very interested in news because I work as a journalist in Japan. I not only read news but also try to catch breaking news, which is quite challenging because I need to trust my sources.

提案: Your answer is informative but could be clearer with better sentence structure and linking words. Avoid repetition and improve coherence by connecting ideas smoothly.

例: I usually use about six or seven news apps on my smartphone. I check news not only from Japan but also from the US and European countries to broaden my perspective.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid vague phrases. Also, explain your reasons more precisely.

例: I am currently a journalist, but if I had the choice, I might not choose this job again because it requires a lot of study and can be very stressful, which affects mental health.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but could be more natural by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I started English training on my smartphone right after waking up. However, after finishing, I plan to catch up on news from the US, especially from the New York Times and the Wall Street Journal.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words to improve coherence and be more concise.

例: Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends because they know I am a journalist. They ask me to talk in more depth about topics like politics, science, and arts. I enjoy these conversations because they help me clarify my thoughts.

× I have to not only read the news about also perceive breaking news.

✓ I have to not only read the news but also perceive breaking news.

The original sentence incorrectly omits the conjunction 'but' in the correlative conjunction 'not only... but also'. To correctly connect the two verbs 'read' and 'perceive', 'but' should be included before 'also'. This improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It is a quite a difficult for every journalist to pursue breaking news because I need a trust to new source.

✓ It is quite difficult for every journalist to pursue breaking news because I need to trust news sources.

The phrase 'a quite a difficult' is incorrect; 'quite difficult' is the correct form without the article 'a'. Also, 'a trust to new source' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to trust news sources'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I have to gain breaking news not only from Japan but also from the US and the European countries as they have to broaden my perspective as much as possible by checking the news.

✓ I have to get breaking news not only from Japan but also from the US and European countries as I have to broaden my perspective as much as possible by checking the news.

The verb 'gain' is not typically used with 'breaking news'; 'get' or 'obtain' is more appropriate. Also, 'the European countries' should be 'European countries' without 'the' because it refers to countries in general. Additionally, 'they have to broaden' is incorrect; it should be 'I have to broaden' to match the subject. These corrections improve verb usage, article use, and subject agreement.

× Actually I'm currently working as a journalist but if I could be another person I wouldn't choose a journalist as a next my job opportunity because it requires a lot of time studying and uh it can cause mental illness as there are many dead.

✓ Actually, I'm currently working as a journalist, but if I could be another person, I wouldn't choose journalism as my next job opportunity because it requires a lot of time studying and it can cause mental illness as there are many deaths.

The phrase 'choose a journalist as a next my job opportunity' is incorrect; 'choose journalism as my next job opportunity' is correct. Also, 'there are many dead' should be 'there are many deaths' to use the correct noun form. These corrections fix pronoun and noun usage errors.

× No, I haven't yet to read the news articles in this morning because just after waking up I started English training through this smartphone.

✓ No, I haven't read the news articles this morning yet because just after waking up I started English training on this smartphone.

The phrase 'haven't yet to read' is incorrect; the correct form is 'haven't read yet'. Also, 'in this morning' should be 'this morning' without 'in'. 'Through this smartphone' is better expressed as 'on this smartphone'. These corrections address tense and preposition errors.

× But after finishing it, I plan to catch up a news especially from the US through the New York Times and the Wall Street Journal.

✓ But after finishing it, I plan to catch up on news especially from the US through the New York Times and the Wall Street Journal.

The phrase 'catch up a news' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'catch up on news'. Also, 'news' is uncountable and does not take an article 'a'. This correction improves the use of quantifiers and prepositions.

× Yes, I often talk a lot about the Daily News with my friends because I'm a journalist and they know that I'm a journalist, so they want me to talk a much deeply about the renews such as politics, science and arts.

✓ Yes, I often talk a lot about the Daily News with my friends because I'm a journalist and they know that, so they want me to talk much more deeply about the news such as politics, science and arts.

The phrase 'talk a much deeply' is incorrect; it should be 'talk much more deeply'. Also, 'the renews' is incorrect; the correct word is 'the news'. These corrections fix adverb usage and noun form errors.

× And I like that conversation because I can make my thoughts much more clear than before by speaking about that.

✓ And I like that conversation because I can make my thoughts much clearer than before by speaking about that.

The phrase 'much more clear' is less common and less correct than 'much clearer' when comparing adjectives. Using the comparative form 'clearer' is appropriate here. This correction improves adjective comparison.