News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I am interested in the news because it affects our daily lives. For example, topics like inflation and taxes are important to understand.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words and complete sentences to explain how you find news. Also, be specific about the apps you use and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I usually find news on my mobile phone by using news apps such as ABC News and Railway News. These apps provide up-to-date information conveniently.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences clearly.

例: I would not like to be a journalist because it is a stressful and demanding job. Since news is constantly updated, journalists have to find and write news every day.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and concise response with reasons, using proper sentence structure and vocabulary.

例: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I was preparing for this speaking test and felt a bit nervous, so I didn't have time.

提案: Your answer has repetition and lacks specific details. Use linking words and provide clear examples of topics you discuss with friends.

例: Yes, I often talk with my friends about news related to finance and entertainment because these topics are interesting and easy to discuss.

× Yes, I'm interested in news because there are many. Big news according to our lives, such as the the inflation and tax.

✓ Yes, I'm interested in news because there is a lot. Big news related to our lives, such as inflation and tax.

The phrase 'there are many' is incorrect because 'news' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular. Therefore, 'there is a lot' is appropriate. Also, 'the the' is a repetition error and 'according to our lives' is better expressed as 'related to our lives'.

× I usually, uh, through the mobile phone and the news apps such as. Such as the ABC or railway. That's a great application.

✓ I usually get news through my mobile phone and news apps such as ABC or Railway. Those are great applications.

The original sentence lacks a verb after 'usually' and misuses 'through' without a clear object. Adding 'get news' clarifies the action. Also, 'the ABC or railway' should be 'ABC or Railway' without 'the' as they are proper nouns. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Not really, because I think journalist is a stressful and demanding career.

✓ Not really, because I think being a journalist is a stressful and demanding career.

The noun 'journalist' needs an article or a gerund phrase to function correctly in this context. 'Being a journalist' correctly expresses the idea of the profession as a career.

× You need to write and find the news every day. Because the news is updated, they are updated news every.

✓ You need to write and find the news every day because the news is updated constantly.

The sentence fragment 'Because the news is updated, they are updated news every.' is incomplete and awkward. Combining the sentences and using 'constantly' clarifies the meaning and corrects the tense and structure.

× No, I haven't read the news this morning because I came to hear and exercise the aisle of speaking and I have no time to read the news because I'm a little bit nervous.

✓ No, I haven't read the news this morning because I came to practice the speaking test and I didn't have time to read the news because I was a little bit nervous.

The phrase 'came to hear and exercise the aisle of speaking' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'came to practice the speaking test'. Also, 'have no time' should be in past tense 'didn't have time' to match the past context. 'I'm a little bit nervous' should be 'I was a little bit nervous' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Yes, we will talk about the news about about financial finance or the entertainment because I think it is a good topic to talk with others.

✓ Yes, we often talk about news related to finance or entertainment because I think they are good topics to discuss with others.

The repetition 'about about' is an error. 'Financial finance' is redundant; 'finance' alone is sufficient. 'The entertainment' should be 'entertainment' without 'the'. Also, 'talk with others' is better expressed as 'discuss with others' or 'talk about with others'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.