News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words and redundant phrases. Start with a direct response, then explain why you are interested in news using simple and coherent sentences.

例: Yes, I am interested in news because it helps me stay informed about what is happening around me and in my country. Being updated is important to understand current events and make better decisions.

提案: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structure and linking words to compare past and present ways of getting news. Avoid run-on sentences and be more concise.

例: I usually find news on social media nowadays. Unlike before when people read newspapers or watched TV, now we just scroll through Facebook to see the latest news.

提案: Make your answer more natural by using simpler expressions and linking your ideas clearly. Avoid awkward phrases like 'not on my bucket list since birth' and explain your reason smoothly.

例: I would not like to be a journalist because I don't enjoy talking a lot. Instead, I chose nursing as my profession because it suits me better.

提案: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'I'm very updating'.

例: Yes, I have read the news this morning by scrolling through Facebook. It is important to stay updated, especially about bad weather like earthquakes or typhoons.

提案: Make your answer more natural and coherent by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain why you don't talk much about news with friends.

例: Not really, we don't talk much about the news because everyone gets updates from social media like Facebook or Twitter. I think my friends are as informed as I am.

× Yes, of course, because the news nowadays are, you know, are daily need for what?

✓ Yes, of course, because the news nowadays is, you know, a daily need for what?

The word 'news' is singular and should be treated as singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'a daily need' requires the article 'a' before it.

× Yes, of course, because the news nowadays are, you know, are daily need for what? For what?

✓ Yes, of course, because the news nowadays is, you know, a daily necessity. What for?

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× We know what are happening in our surroundings, in our country because we must be updated by that.

✓ We know what is happening in our surroundings, in our country because we must be updated about that.

The clause 'what are happening' should be 'what is happening' because 'what' refers to a singular event or situation. Also, the preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'about' is the correct preposition to use with 'updated'.

× We must be updated by that.

✓ We must be updated about that.

The verb 'updated' is commonly followed by the preposition 'about' to indicate the subject of the update.

× Nowadays I find the news in the social media because social media is very known for today be unlike before that we used to read in the newspapers or watching in the TV but now we just scroll our Facebook and there we will see all the news.

✓ Nowadays I find the news on social media because social media is very popular today, unlike before when we used to read newspapers or watch TV, but now we just scroll through Facebook and there we see all the news.

'News' is singular, 'on social media' is the correct preposition, 'known for today be' is incorrect and replaced with 'popular today'. 'Watching in the TV' should be 'watch TV'. Also, 'scroll our Facebook' is better as 'scroll through Facebook'.

× Nowadays I find the news in the social media

✓ Nowadays I find the news on social media

The correct preposition to use with 'social media' is 'on', not 'in'.

× we used to read in the newspapers or watching in the TV

✓ we used to read newspapers or watch TV

No preposition is needed before 'newspapers' and 'TV' in this context. Also, 'watching' should be 'watch' to match 'used to'.

× or watching in the TV

✓ or watch TV

After 'used to', the base form of the verb is used, not the -ing form.

× scroll our Facebook

✓ scroll through Facebook

The correct phrase is 'scroll through Facebook' to indicate browsing content.

× I'm not a type of person that love to talk always, so it's not on my bucket list since birth.

✓ I'm not the type of person that loves to talk always, so it's not on my bucket list since birth.

'Type' is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' to agree in third person singular. Also, 'a type' is better as 'the type' in this context.

× that love to talk always

✓ that always loves to talk

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the verb 'loves' for correct adverb placement.

× So that's why I took up nursing and that's my profession today.

✓ So that's why I took up nursing, and that's my profession today.

The sentence is correct in tense but needs a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses.

× I've always read a news most of the time of the day as I've scrolled my Facebook.

✓ I've always read the news most of the time during the day as I've scrolled through my Facebook.

'News' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'during the day' is more natural than 'of the day'. 'Scrolled my Facebook' should be 'scrolled through my Facebook'.

× I've scrolled my Facebook.

✓ I've scrolled through my Facebook.

The correct preposition with 'scroll' is 'through' when referring to browsing content.

× So it's very, I'm very updating about that, especially if the weather is not good and you have the earthquake or typhoon that is coming.

✓ So I'm very updated about that, especially if the weather is not good and there is an earthquake or typhoon coming.

'Updating' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'updated'. Also, 'you have the earthquake' is incorrect; it should be 'there is an earthquake'. 'That is coming' is better as 'coming'.

× you have the earthquake or typhoon that is coming.

✓ there is an earthquake or typhoon coming.

Use 'there is' to indicate the existence of something, not 'you have'.

× So it's very important to be updated most of the time.

✓ So it's very important to stay updated most of the time.

'Be updated' is less natural than 'stay updated' in this context.

× We are not talking about that much because we are not.

✓ We do not talk about that much because we are not.

The verb tense should be simple present 'do not talk' to match the habitual action. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'because we are not' is unclear and should be completed or omitted.

× We are not talking about that much because we are not.

✓ We do not talk about that much because we are not interested.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'interested' completes the thought and improves clarity.

× most people nowadays are scrolling with their social media like Facebook or Twitter.

✓ most people nowadays are scrolling through their social media like Facebook or Twitter.

The correct preposition with 'scrolling' is 'through' when referring to browsing content.