News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct grammar (use present simple), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I am interested in the news. I find it useful because it provides fresh information about local and world events. For example, I read articles to learn about technology trends and political developments, which helps me stay informed and discuss current issues.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence about your main sources, use correct vocabulary (news, apps) and simple linking words to explain why you use them. Reduce hesitations and correct word order.

例: I usually find news online using apps on my tablet or smartphone. I download reliable news apps and follow their notifications, which makes it easy to access headlines and read full stories whenever I have time.

提案: Answer directly and give a concise reason. Avoid repeating and filler sounds. Use correct expressions to explain limitations (I lack experience/skills). Offer a brief condition or future plan if relevant.

例: I might like to be a journalist, but I think it would be difficult for me now because I lack professional training and experience. If I gained journalism skills through a course or internship, I would consider pursuing it.

提案: Keep the answer simple and grammatically correct. Say yes or no first, then give a short explanation with specific details. Avoid unclear phrases and name the types of news you read.

例: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I was preparing for an exam. I usually catch up later in the day and often read international news from the US and the UK online.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence (frequency), use linking words to explain reasons, and provide a specific example. Avoid repeated words and filler sounds.

例: Not very often. Most of my friends prefer casual conversations, but I have one friend who enjoys discussing news with me. For example, we sometimes talk about major political stories or technology news when we meet.

× I'm very uh, fascinated by reading news speakers.

✓ I'm very fascinated by news presenters.

The original uses 'fascinated by reading news speakers' which is ungrammatical and awkward. 'Fascinated' is correct but should take an appropriate object: 'news presenters' or 'news anchors'. Use 'presenters' instead of 'speakers' and remove 'reading'. This fixes word choice and sentence clarity. Suggestion: use 'fascinated by' + noun phrase (e.g., 'news presenters' or 'news anchors').

× firstly the news will providing lot of fresh information to us and also it's umm, it's hope from the authentic and it's very umm.

✓ Firstly, the news provides a lot of fresh information to us and it usually comes from authentic sources.

The phrase 'will providing' incorrectly combines future auxiliary with -ing form; use simple present 'provides' because habit/general truth. 'Lot of' needs an article 'a lot of'. 'It's hope from the authentic' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it usually comes from authentic sources' to convey meaning. Use plural 'sources'. Suggestion: use simple present for general facts and correct noun phrases ('a lot of', 'authentic sources').

× I usually find nails in the on the Internet such as iPad and I mean applications.

✓ I usually find news on the Internet, for example on my iPad or in apps.

'Find nails in the on the Internet' has multiple errors: 'nails' is wrong word (should be 'news'), and 'in the on' is redundant; the correct preposition is 'on the Internet'. 'iPad' should be 'my iPad' and 'applications' is better as 'apps'. Suggestion: use 'on the Internet' and clarify devices ('on my iPad', 'in apps').

× I will download a news applications and so that it can read easy to find news.

✓ I download news apps so that it's easy to find news.

'I will download a news applications' mixes future 'will' and incorrect article/number. Use simple present 'I download' for habitual action. 'a news applications' should be 'news apps' (plural) or 'a news app'. 'it can read easy to find news' is ungrammatical; 'it's easy to find news' is correct. Suggestion: use consistent number and simpler structure for routines ('I download news apps so it's easy to find news').

× and now it's more hard to be a journalist because I'm not a professional this so maybe it's hard for me to be a real journalist.

✓ and now it's harder to be a journalist because I'm not a professional, so maybe it's hard for me to be a real journalist.

Use comparative 'harder' instead of 'more hard'. 'I'm not a professional this' is incorrect; remove 'this'. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Keep consistent comparative form. Suggestion: use 'harder' for comparisons and remove unnecessary words ('this').

× I am lack of it.

✓ I lack the skills.

'I am lack of it' is ungrammatical. The correct verb is 'lack' followed by an object: 'I lack experience' or 'I lack the skills'. Use a specific noun to clarify what is lacking. Suggestion: replace with 'I lack experience' or 'I lack the necessary skills'.

× Umm umm tech.

✓ I lack technical skills.

'tech' alone is a fragment and unclear. Use 'technical skills' as a noun phrase to express lacking in technology-related abilities. Suggestion: use full noun phrase 'technical skills'.

× Actually not be good. I'm preparing the exam so I just read some umm oh it always can because the news umm because the uh, worst I read the information is including some news in America or British.

✓ Actually, not really. I'm preparing for the exam so I just read a little. Sometimes I read news about the US or Britain.

The original is fragmented and mixes tenses and awkward phrases. 'Actually not be good' should be 'Actually, not really.' 'I'm preparing the exam' needs preposition 'for'. 'I just read some' -> 'a little' or 'a bit'. 'it always can because the news' is unclear; simplified to 'Sometimes I read news about the US or Britain.' Use country adjectives 'US' or 'British' properly. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use 'preparing for the exam', and say 'news about the US or Britain'.

× Umm, it depends on the situation because, umm, it's seldom it's, uh, it's seldom that my friend, that my friend, most of my friends, they like to talk about some chit chat.

✓ It depends on the situation because it's rare; most of my friends like to have small talk.

The original repeats phrases and misuses 'seldom it's'. Use 'it's rare' or 'seldom' once. 'they like to talk about some chit chat' is awkward; 'have small talk' or 'chat about trivial things' is better. Remove redundant repetitions. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use concise expressions like 'most of my friends like small talk'.

× But uh, I does have a friend, uh, she is really like to talk about the news with me.

✓ But I do have a friend; she really likes to talk about the news with me.

'I does have' is incorrect; use 'I do have'. 'she is really like to talk' should be 'she really likes to talk'—subject-verb agreement and correct verb form. Use a semicolon or period to separate the clauses. Suggestion: use 'do' with 'I' in emphatic statements and 'likes' for third person singular.