News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response clearer and more grammatical, start with a direct topic sentence, give one brief reason and a linking word, and keep to two or three sentences. Avoid extra words and fix grammar (e.g., "interested in" not "interests in").

例: No, I'm not very interested in news. Because I focus on my work and studies, I usually don't have spare time to follow current events.

提案: Organize the answer: start with a topic sentence naming the main sources, then give one specific example and a brief opinion using a linking word. Correct names and avoid unclear phrases like "mocking."

例: I usually find news online. For example, I visit CCTV's website and follow short videos on TikTok and Bilibili, although I mainly glance at headlines rather than read full articles.

提案: Give a direct answer, then explain briefly why with full sentences and linking words. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "logical" → "more analytical") and correct job title ("program developer" or "software developer").

例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because I'm not comfortable reporting and interviewing people. I prefer analytical work, so I want to become a software developer.

提案: Provide a coherent short reply: start with a direct yes/no, then briefly summarize what you heard using linking words and complete sentences. Avoid fragmented phrases and be specific about the news impact.

例: No, I haven't read the news this morning, but I heard that the US and Iran agreed to a ceasefire. As a result, oil prices may stabilize.

提案: Respond directly and use one clear reason with a linking word. Fix negatives and grammar (e.g., "we are not interested in" → "we aren't interested in current events"). Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: No, I don't often discuss the news with my friends because we aren't very interested in current events. Instead, we usually talk about our daily lives and schoolwork.

× No, I have no interests in because I focus more on my work and study so that I usually don't have spare time to.

✓ No, I have no interest in it because I focus more on my work and studies, so I usually don't have spare time.

The student used 'interests in' incorrectly; 'interest in' (singular) is common when referring to a general lack of interest. 'In' needs an object ('it') to be complete. 'Study' as an activity is better as 'studies' when paired with 'work'. 'So that' is unnecessary; use 'so' to indicate consequence. Also 'don't have spare time to' is incomplete; remove 'to'. Suggestion: say 'I have no interest in it because I focus more on my work and studies, so I usually don't have spare time.'

× I usually read news on websitessuchascctv.com or on social media like Tiktok and Billy Billy.

✓ I usually read news on websites such as cctv.com or on social media like TikTok and BiliBili.

Run-together 'websitessuchascctv.com' should be separated and phrased 'websites such as cctv.com'. Use 'on websites' and 'on social media'. Proper nouns need correct spelling and capitalization: 'TikTok' and 'BiliBili'. Suggestion: separate items clearly and use 'such as' for examples.

× Reading News Online is mocking.

✓ Reading news online is convenient.

'Mocking' is the wrong word choice (an adjective meaning making fun of). The student likely meant a positive description; 'convenient' or 'useful' fits context. Match capitalization: 'news online' lowercase. Suggestion: choose vocabulary that matches intended meaning (e.g., 'convenient', 'useful', 'fast').

× No, I'm not good at reporting news. What I want to do is logical.

✓ No, I'm not good at reporting news. What I want to do is something logical.

The phrase 'is logical' is grammatical but sounds odd after 'What I want to do'; adding 'something' clarifies meaning. The main issue is awkward sentence structure rather than a verb form error; corrected to a clearer noun phrase. Suggestion: use 'something logical' or rephrase to 'I prefer logical work.'

× Call professional such as. Program Developer.

✓ I would prefer a professional role, such as a program developer.

Fragmented sentence 'Call professional such as. Program Developer.' lacks subject and verb and is disjointed. It should be a complete sentence explaining preference. Suggestion: combine into a full sentence: 'I would prefer a professional role, such as a program developer.'

× No, but I heard that. American and Iran. Seize their fire. So that the price of oil is.

✓ No, but I heard that the United States and Iran agreed to a ceasefire, so the price of oil changed.

This utterance is fragmented and unclear. 'American and Iran' should be 'the United States and Iran' or 'America and Iran'. 'Seize their fire' is incorrect — the correct term is 'ceasefire' or 'agreed to a ceasefire'. 'So that the price of oil is' is incomplete; state what happened to the price (e.g., 'changed' or 'increased'/'decreased'). Suggestion: form complete sentences with subject and verb: 'I heard that the United States and Iran agreed to a ceasefire, so the price of oil fell.' Adjust 'fell'/'rose' to accurate information.

× No, I really talk about news with my friend because we are not interested in.

✓ No, I rarely talk about the news with my friends because we are not interested in current events.

'Really talk' is incorrect; likely 'rarely' fits context. 'Talk about news' needs article: 'talk about the news'. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' if speaking generally, or keep singular; choose plural for generality. Ending 'interested in' needs object: 'interested in current events'. Suggestion: use frequency adverb 'rarely' and complete the phrase 'interested in current events'.