Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，导致意思难以理解。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，明确表达父母如何鼓励你分享，并举例说明。

例: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share with my siblings and friends. They believe sharing is important because it helps build good relationships and mutual support.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，部分句子语法错误，且内容不够具体。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，具体说明分享的内容和原因。

例: I usually share interesting things I find online, like new ideas or products. For example, if I try a new recipe, I will tell my friends about it. I also like to share happy moments and memories with them to strengthen our friendship.

提案: 回答表达不清，语法和词汇使用错误较多。建议简洁明了地说明不愿分享未来计划的原因，并用连词连接句子。

例: I prefer not to share my future plans because they are personal and might change. Also, if others know, their opinions might influence my decisions.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法错误严重，难以理解。建议先明确观点，再用简单句表达原因，避免使用不准确的词汇。

例: No, I don't think more people will share cars because many people like to personalize their cars. Also, sharing cars might increase the risk of damage, so people prefer to keep their cars to themselves.

× I asked my parents overs encouraged me to share like showing my since with my siblings or try to share things with my friends people around me.

✓ My parents encouraged me to share, like showing my sincerity with my siblings or trying to share things with my friends and people around me.

句子结构混乱，导致表达不清晰。应调整语序并补充缺失的词语，使句子通顺且符合英语表达习惯。

× I think that's a good personality should be candor Stan be general to everyone and when we need help with our way or maybe also received their help said there's a mutual.

✓ I think that's a good personality; one should be candid and general to everyone, and when we need help, we can also receive their help; it's mutual.

形容词和副词使用错误，且句子缺少连接词，导致表达不清晰。应使用正确的形容词形式并添加适当的连接词。

× I open share about my friends, what I got recently, like I thought about something online and I tried it, it's pretty good.

✓ I often share with my friends what I got recently, like when I think about something online and try it; it's pretty good.

介词使用错误，“share about”应为“share with”，且句子中缺少必要的连接词。

× If so, I will bring some show with my friends.

✓ If so, I will share some shows with my friends.

代词使用错误，“bring some show”表达不准确，应使用“share some shows”。

× Also like to share with my friends my happiness and my memories that I can receive good stretching from them.

✓ I also like to share my happiness and memories with my friends so that I can receive good support from them.

介词使用错误，“receive good stretching”表达不当，应为“receive good support”。

× I prefer not to share my future plans with others because I think there's some personal decision and we may be movable or B.

✓ I prefer not to share my future plans with others because I think these are personal decisions and may be changeable or uncertain.

代词使用错误，“there's some personal decision”应为“these are personal decisions”，且“movable or B”表达不清晰。

× And changing by others words.

✓ And changed by others' words.

代词和词形错误，应使用被动语态“changed”并正确使用所有格“others'”。

× So I think uh just batch not showing the others.

✓ So I think it's better not to show them to others.

句子结构错误，表达不完整，应调整为完整句子。

× Maybe you can changing it may influence your whole life.

✓ Maybe changing it may influence your whole life.

代词和动词形式错误，“you can changing”应为“changing”。

× No, I don't think people were a show cause because everyone has in performance when they're driving the car, so they might decorating the car according to their own personality.

✓ No, I don't think people would share cars because everyone has their own preferences when they're driving, so they might decorate the car according to their own personality.

时态错误，“were a show cause”应为“would share cars”，且动词形式错误，“decorating”应为“decorate”。

× All they have somehow bids lavender driving the car and also I think showing the car will cause more damage to occur so people won't share.

✓ They all have their own habits while driving the car, and I also think sharing the car will cause more damage, so people won't share.

代词使用错误，“All they have somehow bids lavender”表达不清晰，应改为“they all have their own habits”。