Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid unnatural or incorrect phrases like 'share my toes'. Instead, use clear and relevant examples of sharing. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to share my toys and food with my little brother. Sharing helped me learn to care about others and build good relationships.

提案: Good answer with relevant examples. To improve, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition of 'share' in consecutive sentences.

例: I usually share class notes with my friends, and I also share the latest news on social media. Moreover, we enjoy sharing food together, which strengthens our friendship.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive. Try to combine sentences and use linking words to make your response more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I prefer not to share my private life because it's personal, and I don't feel comfortable when people ask too many questions about it.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain reasons more clearly.

例: In Bahrain, car sharing is uncommon because people worry about traffic cameras capturing violations linked to their car numbers, which makes them hesitant to share cars.

× my parents encouraged me to share my toes with my little brother

✓ my parents encouraged me to share my toys with my little brother

The word 'toes' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'toys' because sharing toes is illogical, while sharing toys is a common activity among siblings.

× People mostly don't like to share their cars together

✓ People mostly don't like to share their cars

The phrase 'share their cars together' is redundant because 'share' already implies 'together'; removing 'together' improves clarity and correctness.