Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“when I was, uh, children”应为“when I was a child”，以及“two apple”应为“two apples”。建议注意语法和单复数形式，避免口语填充词“uh”，使回答更自然流畅。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because it is an important value in our culture. They always said that if you have two apples, you should share one with your friends or family to show kindness.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“not have the ability”应为“do not have the ability”，以及“those stuff”应为“those things”。建议使用更准确的表达，避免语法错误，同时丰富细节使内容更具体。

例: I like to share basic things like food and drinks with people who cannot afford them. For example, in my community, there are some homeless people, and I often give them snacks or water to help.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达不清的问题，如“get damage or loss”应为“get damaged or lost”，以及“Why was the child?”这句话不明所以。建议注意句子结构和逻辑连贯性，避免无意义的插入。

例: I think expensive items or things with special meaning are not suitable for sharing because they can easily get damaged or lost. For example, my grandma gave me a valuable necklace when I was a child, so I prefer to keep it safe rather than share it with friends.

提案: 回答中使用了口语填充词“umm”，且表达略显重复和不够直接。建议减少填充词，简洁明了地回答问题，并适当使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: To be honest, I haven't lent anything recently because I don't know what others need. If they want to borrow something, they usually ask me, but no one has asked lately.

提案: 回答较为完整，但可以增加更多细节和连接词，使表达更自然流畅。建议丰富内容，使用连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性。

例: The first person I would definitely like to share my good news with is my parents because they always worry about me, especially when I am in another city. For example, they often ask about my safety and well-being, so sharing good news with them makes me feel closer to them.

提案: 回答偏离问题，考官问的是与朋友分享的新闻，而学生回答的是与父母分享的内容。建议准确理解问题，直接回答，并注意语法，如“get higher score”应为“get higher scores”。

例: I usually share happy news with my friends, such as when I get high scores in my studies or achieve something important at school.

× Yes, my parents told me to share when I was, uh, children because it is an important value in our culture.

✓ Yes, my parents told me to share when I was, uh, a child because it is an important value in our culture.

这里的主语是“I”，表示单数，后面的“children”是复数形式，应该用单数形式“a child”来保持主谓一致。

× They always said that if you have two apple, you need to share one to your friends or your family to show you kindness.

✓ They always said that if you have two apples, you need to share one with your friends or your family to show your kindness.

“apple”是可数名词，表示复数时需要加复数形式“apples”。

× They always said that if you have two apple, you need to share one to your friends or your family to show you kindness.

✓ They always said that if you have two apples, you need to share one with your friends or your family to show your kindness.

动词“share”后面应接介词“with”表示“与……分享”，而不是“to”。

× I like to share basic things like foods and drinks to those people who are not have the ability to afford those stuff.

✓ I like to share basic things like food and drinks with those people who do not have the ability to afford those things.

“share”后应接介词“with”，表示“与……分享”；“foods”通常用不可数名词“food”；“stuff”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式，应改为“things”；“are not have”语法错误，应改为“do not have”。

× I like to share basic things like foods and drinks to those people who are not have the ability to afford those stuff.

✓ I like to share basic things like food and drinks with those people who do not have the ability to afford those things.

“foods”应改为不可数名词“food”；“stuff”不可数，改为“things”。

× I like to share basic things like foods and drinks to those people who are not have the ability to afford those stuff.

✓ I like to share basic things like food and drinks with those people who do not have the ability to afford those things.

“are not have”是错误的助动词用法，正确应为“do not have”。

× For example, in my community there are some homeless people and I often give them snacks or water to help them.

✓ For example, in my community there are some homeless people and I often give them snacks or water to help them.

该句无语法错误，复数使用正确。

× I think expensive items or things that have special meanings are not suitable for sharing because they can easily get damage or loss.

✓ I think expensive items or things that have special meanings are not suitable for sharing because they can easily get damaged or lost.

“damage”和“loss”在这里应为形容词形式“damaged”和“lost”，表示状态。

× I think expensive items or things that have special meanings are not suitable for sharing because they can easily get damage or loss.

✓ I think expensive items or things that have special meanings are not suitable for sharing because they can easily get damaged or lost.

“get”后应接过去分词“damaged”和“lost”表示被动状态。

× For example, my grandma gave me a valuable necklace. Why was the child? So I prefer to keep it safe rather than share with my friend or another.

✓ For example, my grandma gave me a valuable necklace when I was a child. So I prefer to keep it safe rather than share it with my friend or others.

“Why was the child?”句子结构错误，应改为“when I was a child”表示时间状语；“share with my friend or another”中“another”用法错误，应改为“others”；“share”后应加宾语“it”。

× So I prefer to keep it safe rather than share with my friend or another.

✓ So I prefer to keep it safe rather than share it with my friend or others.

“share”后缺少宾语“it”，且“another”用法不当，应改为“others”。

× To be honest, I haven't really borrowed anything recently because umm, I don't know what kind of things they need.

✓ To be honest, I haven't really lent anything recently because, umm, I don't know what kind of things they need.

“borrow”是借入，语境中应为“lend”（借出），且时态使用正确。

× So if they want to borrow something from me, they will ask me.

✓ So if they want to borrow something from me, they will ask me.

该句时态和语法正确，无需修改。

× But now they don't ask me, so I don't know.

✓ But now they don't ask me, so I don't know.

该句时态和语法正确，无需修改。

× The first person I would definitely like to share my good news with is my parents because they always worry about me, especially when I am in another city.

✓ The first person I would definitely like to share my good news with is my parents because they always worry about me, especially when I am in another city.

该句时态和语法正确，无需修改。

× Most of time I like to share happy moments with my parents, such as when I get higher score in my study or achieve some important at school.

✓ Most of the time I like to share happy moments with my parents, such as when I get higher scores in my studies or achieve something important at school.

“Most of time”应为“Most of the time”；“score”应为复数“scores”；“study”应为复数“studies”；“some important”缺少名词，应改为“something important”。

× Most of time I like to share happy moments with my parents, such as when I get higher score in my study or achieve some important at school.

✓ Most of the time I like to share happy moments with my parents, such as when I get higher scores in my studies or achieve something important at school.

“Most of time”缺少定冠词“the”，应为“Most of the time”。