Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“which is a good. Habits”不连贯。建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, when I was a child, my parents always told me that sharing with other kids is a good habit that we should learn from a young age.

提案: 回答中有口头语“uh”，影响流畅性。建议减少口头语，使用更自然的连接词，并且句子结构可以更紧凑。

例: I usually share snacks and drinks with others, and sometimes I share my clothes with my close friends.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，且内容不够连贯。建议理清思路，使用完整句子，避免重复和口头语，明确表达观点。

例: I think expensive items and things that have special meaning to me are not suitable for sharing. Also, shoes and clothes are very personal, so I usually don't share them.

提案: 时态使用不当，“are”应为过去时。句子结构简单，建议使用更自然的表达并注意时态一致。

例: Yes, definitely. Last weekend, I shared some bread with my friends while we were watching a movie at the cinema.

提案: 句子结构不够清晰，时态混用。建议简化句子，注意时态一致，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I would definitely share good news with my parents because they are very close to me. When they hear good news from me, they feel happy and proud.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“was sure”应为“share”，“S countries society”表达不明确。建议使用正确的词汇和句型，表达更具体清晰。

例: I share different kinds of news with my friends, such as entertainment news and news about society in some countries. We often discuss our different opinions.

× Yes, when I still was a child, my parents always told me that I need to share with other kids, which is a good. Habits that we need to learn from a young age.

✓ Yes, when I was still a child, my parents always told me that I needed to share with other kids, which is a good habit that we need to learn from a young age.

这里时态使用不当。描述过去的事情时，应该用过去时态。'I need' 应改为 'I needed'，'a good. Habits' 应改为 'a good habit'，因为这里指的是单数习惯。

× Yes, when I still was a child, my parents always told me that I need to share with other kids, which is a good. Habits that we need to learn from a young age.

✓ Yes, when I was still a child, my parents always told me that I needed to share with other kids, which is a good habit that we need to learn from a young age.

'Habits' 应为单数 'habit'，因为前面用的是 'a good'，表示单数。

× There are a lot of things that I usually share with other people, uh, for example the snacks and the drinks, and sometimes I will share my clothes with my close friends.

✓ There are a lot of things that I usually share with other people, for example, snacks and drinks, and sometimes I share my clothes with my close friends.

'the snacks and the drinks' 中不需要定冠词 'the'，因为这里泛指零食和饮料。'I will share' 改为 'I share' 更符合习惯表达。

× I think things that are expensive and have memorable, memorable impacts on me, which is not suitable for sharing.

✓ I think things that are expensive and have memorable impacts on me are not suitable for sharing.

重复使用 'memorable' 是错误的，且句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，需改为 'are not suitable'。

× And also the shoes and the clothes you need to, uh. Very private that that that was out. Also answerable for sharing.

✓ Also, shoes and clothes are very private and not suitable for sharing.

原句中代词使用混乱，句子不完整，需简化并明确表达。

× Definitely yes. Last weekend I shared breads with my friends when we are at cinema watching movies.

✓ Definitely yes. Last weekend I shared bread with my friends when we were at the cinema watching movies.

描述过去事件时，'are' 应改为过去时 'were'。'breads' 应为不可数名词 'bread'。

× Definitely yes. Last weekend I shared breads with my friends when we are at cinema watching movies.

✓ Definitely yes. Last weekend I shared bread with my friends when we were at the cinema watching movies.

'breads' 是复数形式，但 'bread' 通常作为不可数名词使用，表示食物总称。

× Hmm, I will say it's definitely be my parents because parents are really close to me and after they heard about good news from me, they were very happy and they will be proud, very proud of me.

✓ Hmm, I would say it's definitely my parents because they are really close to me, and after they hear good news from me, they are very happy and very proud of me.

'will say it's definitely be' 结构错误，应改为 'would say it's definitely'。时态应保持一致，描述习惯性动作用一般现在时。

× Hmm, I will say it's definitely be my parents because parents are really close to me and after they heard about good news from me, they were very happy and they will be proud, very proud of me.

✓ Hmm, I would say it's definitely my parents because they are really close to me, and after they hear good news from me, they are very happy and very proud of me.

'parents' 前应加定冠词 'the' 或用代词 'they'，避免重复。

× Hmm I was sure different kind of news with my friends like some about the entertainment news and some news about S countries society. We will talk about different opinions from each other's.

✓ Hmm, I share different kinds of news with my friends, like some about entertainment and some about society in different countries. We talk about different opinions with each other.

'was sure' 应为 'share'，'different kind' 应为复数 'different kinds'，'S countries society' 表达不清，改为 'society in different countries'。'each other's' 用法错误，应为 'each other'。