Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在较多语法错误和重复词汇，且表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because sharing is a good habit that helps build friendships.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且缺少连贯性。建议使用简单明了的句子，避免重复，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I usually share snacks with others because there are many kinds, so people can choose their favorites.

提案: 表达不够清晰，存在语法和词汇错误。建议明确表达观点，使用正确的词汇和句型，并避免重复。

例: I think money is not suitable to share because if people know you have a lot, they might always ask to borrow it.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误多，表达不连贯。建议使用简单句，清晰表达最近的情况，并避免重复。

例: Recently, I haven't shared much because I have been busy studying, but I sometimes recommend books to others.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的句子，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，完整表达想法。

例: I would share good news with my mom first because she is the most important person in my life and I want to make her happy.

提案: 表达不够自然，存在语法和词汇错误，且重复较多。建议使用更自然的表达，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: If I have news, I usually share gossip with my friends because it makes them happy and we have fun together.

× my parents always told me I should share something to others because this behavior, uh, can uh, share a good, good habit and people maybe will like you.

✓ my parents always told me I should share something with others because this behavior can create a good habit and people may like you.

动词后面接动名词形式时，应该用动名词（-ing形式）表示动作的进行或习惯。原句中“can share a good, good habit”表达不准确，应该用“can create a good habit”更符合语义。

× my parents always told me I should share something to others because this behavior, uh, can uh, share a good, good habit and people maybe will like you.

✓ my parents always told me I should share something with others because this behavior can create a good habit and people may like you.

动词“share”后面应接介词“with”表示“与某人分享”，而不是“to”。

× Well, I usually share the snack to others, umm, because snack, uh, it's had has a variety of of, uh, strains.

✓ Well, I usually share snacks with others because snacks have a variety of types.

“share”后应接介词“with”，且“snack”应为复数形式“snacks”，表示一般情况。

× Well, I usually share the snack to others, umm, because snack, uh, it's had has a variety of of, uh, strains.

✓ Well, I usually share snacks with others because snacks have a variety of types.

“snack”应使用复数形式“snacks”，因为这里指的是多种零食。

× So which can, uh, make people to choose choose, uh.

✓ So which can make people choose.

动词“make”后直接接动词原形，不需要“to”。

× I think money is not acceptable to share others.

✓ I think money is not acceptable to share with others.

“share”后应接介词“with”，表示“与某人分享”。

× if you uh, show you have a lot of money, umm, maybe people will, will lemon, uh, will borrow money to, to to you.

✓ if you show you have a lot of money, maybe people will borrow money from you.

“borrow”后应接介词“from”表示“从某人借”，而不是“to”。“lemon”是错误词，应删除。

× No I recently no share something with others because I I just always studies so if I have something umm maybe I recommend my my books to to others.

✓ No, I haven't shared anything with others recently because I have just been studying. If I have something, maybe I will recommend my books to others.

表达最近未做某事应使用现在完成时，且“studies”应为“studying”的现在分词形式。

× No I recently no share something with others because I I just always studies so if I have something umm maybe I recommend my my books to to others.

✓ No, I haven't shared anything with others recently because I have just been studying. If I have something, maybe I will recommend my books to others.

“I just always studies”中“studies”应为动名词“studying”，且“just always”搭配不当，应改为“have just been”。

× Well, definitely it's my mom because my mom is my, uh, the most important, uh, person in my life.

✓ Well, definitely it's my mom because she is the most important person in my life.

避免重复使用“my mom”，用代词“she”替代更自然。

× So if I have some good news is I, I'd like to share this news, uh, with my mom is made her really.

✓ So if I have some good news, I'd like to share it with my mom to make her really happy.

原句结构混乱，缺少连词和完整表达，应调整为完整句子并补充缺失部分。

× If I do have some, uh, news, I'd definitely share gossip to my friends, Umm, because my friends always, uh, prefer to gossip news, uh, which can make them a really happy and have fun.

✓ If I do have some news, I'd definitely share gossip with my friends because my friends always prefer gossip, which can make them really happy and have fun.

“share gossip to”应为“share gossip with”，且“gossip news”表达不自然，改为“gossip”。

× Well, I usually share the snack to others, umm, because snack, uh, it's had has a variety of of, uh, strains.

✓ Well, I usually share snacks with others because snacks have a variety of types.

“a variety of strains”中“strains”用词不当，应为“types”或“kinds”，表示种类。