Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“and and how it can stress”不通顺。建议注意句子结构，避免重复和语法错误，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a very young age. Whenever a friend visited, they encouraged me to share my favorite food or toys because sharing is an important value in Chinese culture. This taught me the importance of generosity and how it helps build good relationships.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“an interesting bargains”应为“interesting bargains”，“a closer relationships”应为“closer relationships”。建议注意单复数和冠词的正确使用，同时丰富细节使内容更具体。

例: I like to share interesting bargains or discounts with my friends because they can save money. Also, if I find delicious dishes or local specialties, I often recommend them or order some to share. Sharing these things helps us build closer relationships.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“should be kept should be kept private”，以及“trust issue”应为“trust issues”。建议注意表达的准确性和流畅性，避免重复。

例: I think personal items like toothbrushes, towels, or underwear should not be shared because of hygiene and privacy concerns. Also, sharing sensitive information can cause trust issues, so it's better to keep such things private.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“preparing all for for this”，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，理清逻辑，使表达更清晰自然。

例: Yes, recently I have shared with others how stressful it is to prepare for the IELTS test. I am applying for a master's degree in New Zealand because I want my son to attend primary school there, and I hope to better understand the preparation process.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，如“he he he”，“encourage encourage”，“with me with with him”。建议注意发音和表达的准确性，避免重复，使回答更自然。

例: The first person I would share good news with is my husband. He is my closest and best friend. He is very supportive and always encourages me to step out of my comfort zone. Sharing good news with him makes the moment even more special.

提案: 回答中存在词汇错误和表达不清，如“January happy”应为“genuinely happy”，“confine them my friends”不通顺，“advices”应为“advice”。建议加强词汇准确性和句子结构的练习。

例: I share both good and bad news with my friends. For example, if I get a promotion at work, I celebrate with them because I know they would be genuinely happy for me. On the other hand, if I have a problem like a disagreement with my husband, I confide in my friends because they offer valuable advice and emotional support.

× Yes, my parents taught me to share from the very young age.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me to share from a very young age.

这里的错误是冠词使用不当，应该用不定冠词'a'而不是定冠词'the'，因为这里指的是一个泛指的年龄阶段，而不是特定的某个年龄。

× Whenever there's a friend visiting, they encourage me to share my favorite food or toys with them because sharing is considered as an important value in Chinese culture.

✓ Whenever there's a friend visiting, they encourage me to share my favorite food or toys with them because sharing is considered an important value in Chinese culture.

短语中“considered as”是不正确的用法，正确用法是“considered + 名词”，不需要介词“as”。

× This taught me how important that generosity is and and how it can stress.

✓ This taught me how important generosity is and how it can help relieve stress.

原句结构混乱，且“stress”用法不当，应表达“减轻压力”的意思，需用动词短语“help relieve stress”。

× I like to share an interesting bargains or discounts with them because I think they will help them save money.

✓ I like to share interesting bargains or discounts with them because I think they will help them save money.

“an”是单数冠词，不能修饰复数名词“bargains”，应去掉“an”。

× I like to share an interesting bargains or discounts with them because I think they will help them save money.

✓ I like to share interesting bargains or discounts with them because I think they will help them save money.

同上，冠词与复数名词不匹配。

× I think sharing will help us build a closer relationships and more.

✓ I think sharing will help us build closer relationships and more.

“relationships”是复数，前面的形容词“closer”不需要加冠词“a”。

× Personal items such as toothbrushes, towels or underwears should be kept should be kept private because of hygiene or privacy concern.

✓ Personal items such as toothbrushes, towels or underwear should be kept private because of hygiene or privacy concerns.

“underwear”是不可数名词，不加复数形式“underwears”；“concern”应为复数“concerns”，因为指多个方面的顾虑。

× Personal items such as toothbrushes, towels or underwears should be kept should be kept private because of hygiene or privacy concern.

✓ Personal items such as toothbrushes, towels or underwear should be kept private because of hygiene or privacy concerns.

“because of”后面应接复数名词“concerns”，表示多种顾虑。

× Additionally, sharing sensitive information would usually lead to trust issue, so it's best to just keep to oneself.

✓ Additionally, sharing sensitive information would usually lead to trust issues, so it's best to just keep to oneself.

“trust issue”应为复数“trust issues”，表示多种信任问题。

× Yes, I have been sharing with others how stressful I am preparing for IELTS test recently umm because I am applying for a master degree in New Zealand UMM.

✓ Yes, I have been sharing with others how stressful I am preparing for the IELTS test recently because I am applying for a master's degree in New Zealand.

“IELTS test”前应加定冠词“the”；“master degree”应为“master's degree”，表示硕士学位。

× I want to bring my whole family there so that my son could attend primary school and that I have a better understanding preparing all for for this.

✓ I want to bring my whole family there so that my son can attend primary school and that I have a better understanding in preparing for this.

“could”改为“can”表示现在或将来可能性；“understanding preparing all for for this”结构混乱，应改为“understanding in preparing for this”。

× He he he is incredibly supportive and always encourage encourage me to step out of the comfort zone.

✓ He is incredibly supportive and always encourages me to step out of the comfort zone.

主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词“encourage”应加-s变为“encourages”。

× So I think he would be genuinely happy for me and sharing good news with me with with him would make the moment even more special.

✓ So I think he would be genuinely happy for me, and sharing good news with him would make the moment even more special.

句子中“sharing good news with me with with him”重复且结构混乱，应删去多余部分，改为“sharing good news with him”。

× For example, if I get a promotion at work, I would celebrate with them because I know they would be January happy for me.

✓ For example, if I get a promotion at work, I would celebrate with them because I know they would be genuinely happy for me.

“January happy”是错误表达，应为“genuinely happy”，表示真诚地高兴。

× However, on the other hand, if I umm, run into a problem like a disagreement with my husband, that would confine them my friends because they would offer me valuable advices and emotional support.

✓ However, on the other hand, if I run into a problem like a disagreement with my husband, I would confide in my friends because they would offer me valuable advice and emotional support.

“confine them my friends”错误，应为“confide in my friends”；“advices”是不可数名词，应为“advice”。