Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构，避免冗长和重复。可以使用更简洁且语法正确的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed it helps develop a generous personality and builds good relationships with others.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“can makes”和“share this feel”。建议注意动词形式和介词搭配，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I like to share delicious food or snacks with others because eating tasty food makes me feel happy, and I want my friends to enjoy the same feeling.

提案: 回答中有严重语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议学习常见的个人物品词汇和正确的句子结构，避免拼写错误和混乱的表达。

例: I think personal items such as toothbrushes, towels, and underwear are not suitable for sharing because they are unhygienic.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，如“A. Kind of snakes”。建议使用完整句子并正确拼写单词，确保信息清晰。

例: Recently, I shared some spicy snacks with my best friend.

提案: 回答不完整且语法混乱，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达原因，避免重复和断句错误。

例: The first person I would like to share good news with is Lily, my best friend, because we share similar interests and she always supports me.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，如“MO MO”。建议注意句子完整性和正确拼写，表达更自然。

例: I prefer to share personal news with my friends rather than my parents because they understand me better and can offer support.

× Yes, my parents teach me to share when I was a child they told me it is very important to have a broaden a personality and share with others can.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They told me it was very important to broaden my personality and share with others.

这里的动作发生在过去，所以动词teach应使用过去式taught；句子中有语法和结构错误，需拆分为两个句子；'have a broaden a personality'表达不正确，应为broaden my personality；'share with others can'语序错误，应去掉can。

× I like to share delicious food or snacks with others because eating tasty food can makes me feel a sense of happiness.

✓ I like to share delicious food or snacks with others because eating tasty food can make me feel a sense of happiness.

主语是can，后面动词应为原形make，而不是makes。

× I also want to share this feel to my friends and to others.

✓ I also want to share this feeling with my friends and others.

'feel'应为名词形式'feeling'；'share'后面搭配介词是'with'，而不是'to'。

× I think personal items like on your own brush T shape teeth, brushes, towels or underwear are nobles to are no suitable to share.

✓ I think personal items like your own toothbrush, towels, or underwear are not suitable to share.

'brush T shape teeth'表达不清，应为'toothbrush'；'nobles to are no suitable'语序和用词错误，应为'are not suitable'；去掉多余词汇。

× Recently I shared with my best friend A. Kind of snakes. It's a spicy, spicy snacks.

✓ Recently I shared a kind of snack with my best friend A. It's a spicy snack.

'snakes'应为'snacks'；'kind of'后面接单数名词；重复使用'spicy'不合适。

× It must be Lily, my best friend. Because we were, because we have the same interesting things about life. So sharing with her.

✓ It must be Lily, my best friend, because we have the same interests in life, so I like sharing with her.

句子结构不完整，断句不当；'interesting things'应为'interests'；需要连贯表达原因和结果。

× I prefer to share news with my friends rather than my parents because my friends. Know about me MO MO better and they can support me.

✓ I prefer to share news with my friends rather than my parents because my friends know me better and they can support me.

句子中断句错误，'my friends.'后不应有句号；'know about me MO MO better'表达不清，改为'know me better'更自然。