Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“snakes”应为“snacks”，句子结构不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, definitely. When I was about 3 or 4 years old, my parents taught me to share my toys and snacks with my friends because they believed it was good manners.

提案: 回答内容重复且表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议简化句子，使用连贯的表达，并具体说明分享的内容。

例: I like to share my daily experiences with my friends. For example, when I find a good restaurant or shop, I tell them about it so we can enjoy it together.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和用词有误，如“informations”应为“information”，“couldn't to share”应为“shouldn't share”。建议注意语法准确性和用词规范。

例: I think personal information, such as our address or financial details, should not be shared with strangers or people we don't know well because it can be risky.

提案: 回答内容具体，但句子结构不够流畅，部分表达不自然。建议使用更连贯的句子和适当的连接词。

例: Last month, I discovered a traditional restaurant in the countryside, which is quite different from city restaurants. I shared this with my friends, and we decided to visit it together next week.

提案: 回答中填充词较多，表达不够流畅，语法错误明显。建议减少口头语，使用完整且连贯的句子表达。

例: I would first share good news with my mother because she loves me very much. I also like to share with my best friend Lily since we have grown up together and have a close relationship.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并组织清晰的句子。

例: I often share interesting videos I find on social media with my friends. Also, when I achieve something like winning a competition, I like to share the good news with them.

× my parents told me I needed to share my toys and snakes with my friends.

✓ my parents told me I needed to share my toys and snacks with my friends.

这里'snakes'应为'snacks'，是单词拼写错误，不属于语法问题，但为了表达正确，需改为'snacks'。

× Maybe they think is a good manner for me and I think it's definitely we need to share some things with my friend.

✓ Maybe they think it is a good manner for me and I think we definitely need to share some things with my friends.

缺少主语'it'，第三人称单数动词'think'后应有主语，且'friend'应为复数形式。

× Maybe they think is a good manner for me and I think it's definitely we need to share some things with my friend.

✓ Maybe they think it is a good manner for me and I think we definitely need to share some things with my friends.

'friend'应为复数形式，因为指的是多个朋友。

× Sometimes I share my daily life with my friends and we communicate our recently situations and I often I won't go to a good restaurant or good shop.

✓ Sometimes I share my daily life with my friends and we communicate our recent situations, and I often go to a good restaurant or good shop.

'recently'是副词，修饰动词，句中应使用形容词'recent'来修饰名词'situations'。另外，'I often I won't go'结构重复且语义不通，应改为'I often go'。

× Good shop I shared with my friends and when I know a good restaurant or a food I also share with my friend.

✓ Good shops I share with my friends, and when I know a good restaurant or good food, I also share with my friends.

'shop'应为复数形式'shops'，'friend'应为复数形式'friends'，保持一致。

× I think some personal informations we couldn't to share with our not familiar friends like our personal address or our personal financial situation.

✓ I think some personal information we couldn't share with our unfamiliar friends, like our personal address or our personal financial situation.

'informations'是不可数名词，应为'information'；'couldn't to share'中不应有'to'；'not familiar friends'应改为'unfamiliar friends'。

× I think some personal informations we couldn't to share with our not familiar friends like our personal address or our personal financial situation.

✓ I think some personal information we couldn't share with our unfamiliar friends, like our personal address or our personal financial situation.

'informations'错误，应为不可数名词'information'。

× I think is a little danger if we shared with strangers or our not familiar people.

✓ I think it is a little dangerous if we share with strangers or unfamiliar people.

'danger'是名词，句中应使用形容词'dangerous'；'not familiar people'应改为'unfamiliar people'；时态应保持一致。

× Last month I found a good traditional restaurant in the countryside, not in city center.

✓ Last month I found a good traditional restaurant in the countryside, not in the city center.

'city center'前缺少定冠词'the'，表示特指。

× Last month I found a good traditional restaurant in the countryside, not in city center.

✓ Last month I found a good traditional restaurant in the countryside, not in the city center.

'city center'是特指地点，前面应加定冠词'the'。

× So I recommended and shared with my friends and we decided the next week we together to go to this restaurant.

✓ So I recommended and shared it with my friends, and we decided to go to this restaurant together next week.

句子结构混乱，'we together to go'不正确，应调整为'we decided to go together'，并调整时间状语位置。

× Uh, I think maybe my mother because she is very, uh, love me and I want to share my, uh, personal experience with her and we communicate some interesting things.

✓ Uh, I think maybe my mother because she loves me very much, and I want to share my personal experiences with her, and we communicate about some interesting things.

'she is very love me'语法错误，应为'she loves me very much'；'communicate some interesting things'应为'communicate about some interesting things'。

× Uh, we together to grow up. So, umm, we have a good relationship.

✓ Uh, we grew up together. So, umm, we have a good relationship.

'we together to grow up'结构错误，应为'we grew up together'，使用过去时态。

× Uh, sometimes when I watch some very interesting social media videos, I share with my friends on the social media and when I meet some good news like I get the 1st place first place in a a competitions or some very good congratulations things I share with my friend.

✓ Uh, sometimes when I watch some very interesting social media videos, I share them with my friends on social media, and when I receive good news like getting first place in a competition or some congratulations, I share it with my friends.

'share with my friends on the social media'中'the'不必要；'meet some good news'应为'receive good news'；'a a competitions'重复且复数错误，应为'a competition'；'congratulations things'表达不当，应简化为'congratulations'；'friend'应为复数'friends'。