Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达有些重复和不够自然，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且注意时态一致。可以多用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. I often shared my toys and snacks with my friends and siblings, which made everyone happy. Sharing is an important part of Chinese culture, and I still enjoy sharing things with my family and friends.

提案: 回答内容较为冗长且有语法错误，建议分句表达，使用连接词如“for example”后紧跟具体例子，注意时态和主谓一致。

例: I like to share many things with others. For example, I used to share toys with my friends during childhood, which helped us have a great time together. Nowadays, I often share good news with my parents, and they feel very happy.

提案: 表达不够清晰且有语法错误，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，明确指出哪些内容不适合分享。

例: Some things are not suitable for sharing, such as personal information like bank passwords and credit card details. Sharing such sensitive information can lead to security risks.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，建议简洁表达，注意人称和时态一致，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Recently, I watched a beautiful movie and decided to share it with my friends because I think they will enjoy it. I also read a new book and shared it with them so we can discuss it together.

提案: 表达有些混乱，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用正确的短语表达感情，如“proud of me”。

例: I usually share my good news with my parents first because they are always there for me. They feel proud of my achievements and are happy to hear about my success.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意动词搭配和句子连贯性。

例: I often share various news with my friends. For example, when I watch a good movie or read an interesting book, I share it with them so we can enjoy and discuss it together.

× So I always share my toys and snacks with my friends.

✓ So I always shared my toys and snacks with my friends.

这里描述的是过去的习惯行为，应该使用过去时态。将“share”改为“shared”符合时态要求。

× They are all happy about that and I think sharing is a good manner of Chinese culture and I like to share things with my parents and friends.

✓ They were all happy about that and I think sharing is a good manner of Chinese culture and I liked to share things with my parents and friends.

前半句描述过去的情景，应该用过去时态“were”。后半句表达过去的喜好，应该用过去时态“liked”。

× For example, I like to share snacks with my friend and siblings and in my childhood I like to share toys with my friends and we have had a good time together and now I I like to share some good news to my parents and they are very happy for my.

✓ For example, I like to share snacks with my friends and siblings and in my childhood I liked to share toys with my friends and we had a good time together and now I like to share some good news with my parents and they are very happy for me.

“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为有多个朋友。过去时态“like”应改为“liked”。“have had”改为一般过去时“had”。“share some good news to”应改为“share some good news with”。“happy for my”应改为“happy for me”。

× Well, there are a lot of things don't assume for sharing, like some personal details, for example some bank passwords and credit card and so on is maybe don't sue for share and some things like passwords about personal security is not suitable share.

✓ Well, there are a lot of things not suitable for sharing, like some personal details, for example some bank passwords and credit cards and so on. Maybe they shouldn't be shared, and some things like passwords about personal security are not suitable to share.

“don't assume for sharing”应为“not suitable for sharing”。“credit card”应为复数“credit cards”。“don't sue for share”应为“shouldn't be shared”。“is not suitable share”应为“are not suitable to share”。修正了介词和动词搭配错误。

× Yes, I have watched a very beautiful movie in recent days and I decide to share it with my friends.

✓ Yes, I watched a very beautiful movie recently and I decided to share it with my friends.

“have watched”与“in recent days”搭配不自然，改为一般过去时“watched”。“decide”应为过去时“decided”，保持时态一致。

× I think she will love it and we can chat that movie together and and so on.

✓ I think they will love it and we can chat about that movie together and so on.

“she”指代不明，改为“they”更合适。动词“chat”后应加介词“about”。

× I watch I I read a new book in recent days and also share it with my friend.

✓ I watched a new book recently and also shared it with my friend.

“watch”应为“watched”，且“read”应为过去时“read”（发音同red），保持时态一致。

× Well, to be honest, I like to share my good news with my parents first because they are always on there and be glad to to know my good news and they will be appreciated to me, to my achievements and proud of me.

✓ Well, to be honest, I like to share my good news with my parents first because they are always there and glad to know my good news and they will appreciate me, my achievements and be proud of me.

“on there”应为“there”。“be glad to to know”应为“glad to know”。“will be appreciated to me”应为“will appreciate me”。修正了代词和动词搭配错误。

× Well, I like to share a lot of news to my friends.

✓ Well, I like to share a lot of news with my friends.

动词“share”后应接介词“with”，而非“to”。

× Like for example, when I watch a very good movie or I read a good book, I I share it with my friends and expect they can watch and read this book and chat with me.

✓ Like for example, when I watch a very good movie or read a good book, I share it with my friends and expect they can watch the movie and read the book and chat with me.

“expect they can watch and read this book”表达不清，应明确“watch the movie and read the book”。去掉重复的“I”。