Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“a inner beauty”应为“an inner beauty”，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免口头语“umm”，并且更直接地表达观点。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed sharing is an important quality. For example, I often shared my toys and books with my two sisters to help us get along better.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复表达，如“not really suits are not really suitable”，且句子较长不够简洁。建议使用更准确的表达，避免重复，并且分句清晰。

例: I like to share things like stationery and notebooks with others because they are not very personal. However, I prefer not to share personal items like my phone or iPad.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法错误，如“make me feel”应为“makes me feel”，且“private information”用复数形式更合适。建议注意主谓一致和词汇的准确使用。

例: I believe personal items such as my phone, iPad, or clothes are not suitable for sharing because they contain private information, and sharing them makes me feel uncomfortable.

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和表达不清，如“he's he always talks”重复且“contact”应为“content”。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并注意单词拼写。

例: Recently, I wanted to share my feelings about a university teacher who teaches Arts of Persuasion. I don't like his teaching style because he often talks about topics unrelated to our course content.

提案: 回答中有重复词“tell tell”，且“interesting meals”可能是表达错误，应为“interesting matters”或“news”。建议注意用词准确，避免重复。

例: I would share good news with my mom first because she is trustworthy and mature. I can tell her interesting things, and she will stay calm and supportive.

提案: 回答不完整且句子结构混乱，缺少结尾，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并避免重复。

例: I share various kinds of news with my friends. For example, I tell them funny things that happen during lectures, like my dislike of a teacher's style, and we also recommend restaurants to each other.

× Yes, my parents always told me I have to share my stuff to others because it's kind of, umm, a inner beauty.

✓ Yes, my parents always told me I have to share my stuff with others because it's kind of, umm, an inner beauty.

这里的错误是介词使用错误，应该用"share with others"而不是"share to others"。介词"with"表示与某人分享，"to"不适用于此处。

× ...because it's kind of, umm, a inner beauty.

✓ ...because it's kind of, umm, an inner beauty.

单词"inner"以元音音素开头，前面的不定冠词应使用"an"而不是"a"。

× Like sharing toys and my books with my siblings, my two sisters, so they can be more.

✓ Like sharing toys and my books with my siblings, my two sisters, so they can have more.

句子中"so they can be more"结构不正确，应该用"have more"表示他们可以拥有更多。

× Actually most of the things I feel that is fine to share with others like my stationery or my notebooks, but I think something personal is not really suits are not really suitable to share with others like my phone or my iPad.

✓ Actually, most of the things I feel are fine to share with others like my stationery or my notebooks, but I think something personal is not really suitable to share with others like my phone or my iPad.

主语"most of the things"是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式"are"而不是"is"。另外，"suits"用法错误，应改为"suitable"。

× ...sharing this kind of thing make me feel uncomfortable.

✓ ...sharing this kind of thing makes me feel uncomfortable.

主语是单数"sharing this kind of thing"，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式"makes"。

× Yes, I really want to share one of my teacher in university and he is teaching me a subject called Arts of persuasion and I don't really like his style of teaching because he's he always talks about something not related to our contact.

✓ Yes, I really want to share about one of my teachers in university and he is teaching me a subject called Arts of Persuasion and I don't really like his style of teaching because he always talks about something not related to our content.

"one of my teacher"应为复数"teachers"。"contact"应为"content"，表示课程内容。

× I would like to share good news with my mom first because I think she is really trustworthy and she is mature too, so I can tell tell her those interesting meals and meanwhile she can still stay calm.

✓ I would like to share good news with my mom first because I think she is really trustworthy and she is mature too, so I can tell her those interesting things and meanwhile she can still stay calm.

"tell tell her those interesting meals"中"meals"用词不当，应为"things"或其他合适名词。重复"tell"是笔误。

× I share a variety of things with my friends for example, I will share some funny things during my lecture with my friends like I don't like his teaching style or maybe we will also share some restaurant with each other that we.

✓ I share a variety of things with my friends. For example, I will share some funny things during my lecture with my friends, like that I don't like his teaching style, or maybe we will also share some restaurants with each other.

句子结构混乱，缺少标点分隔，导致表达不清。应分句并调整词语顺序，使句子通顺。