Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answerは自然で効果的ですが、もう少し具体的な例を加えると良いでしょう。また、文のつながりを明確にするために接続詞を使うとより良くなります。

例: When I was a child, my parents taught me the importance of sharing. For example, they encouraged me to share my toys with my siblings, which helped me develop good relationships with them.

提案: 回答は具体的ですが、'last summer'の繰り返しや文の流れが少し不自然です。繰り返しを避け、接続詞を使って文を滑らかにしましょう。

例: I like giving souvenirs to my friends. For instance, last summer when I visited Osaka, I bought special cookies with Osaka Castle printed on the packaging and shared them with my friends.

提案: 回答は簡潔ですが、'uh'のような言葉は避け、文法的な誤りを直しましょう。また、理由をもう少し詳しく説明すると良いです。

例: I think money is not suitable to share because it can often cause misunderstandings or conflicts between people.

提案: 回答は明確ですが、'now'と'recently'の両方を使うのは冗長です。理由をもう少し具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Recently, I haven't shared any items with my friends because I have been busy studying English and learning about tourism at home.

提案: 'a good news'は文法的に誤りです。'news'は不可算名詞なので冠詞は不要です。また、理由をもう少し自然に表現しましょう。

例: I would like to share good news with my father because he is very open-minded and always listens to my opinions and stories carefully.

提案: 回答は良いですが、'the cafe I like'より具体的な名前や特徴を加えるとより良くなります。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげましょう。

例: I often share information about my favorite anime characters and stylish cafes I like with my friends because they also enjoy visiting trendy places.

× I like giving souvenirs to my friends. For example, last summer, last summer, I went to Osaka with my friends and I bought some special cookies printed in Osaka Castle and I gave them.

✓ I like giving souvenirs to my friends. For example, last summer, I went to Osaka with my friends and I bought some special cookies printed with Osaka Castle and I gave them.

The phrase 'printed in Osaka Castle' is incorrect because cookies cannot be printed inside a castle. The correct preposition is 'printed with' to indicate the design on the cookies. This is a preposition usage error (ID 11). Also, the repeated phrase 'last summer' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× I think money isn't suitable to share. This is because money often become uh, trigger to create conflicts.

✓ I think money isn't suitable to share. This is because money often becomes a trigger to create conflicts.

The verb 'become' should be in the third person singular form 'becomes' to agree with the singular subject 'money' (ID 2). Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'trigger' (ID 22). These corrections improve subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Now, recently I haven't shared any items with my friends because I often spend a lot of time studying English or tourism at home.

✓ Recently, I haven't shared any items with my friends because I often spend a lot of time studying English or tourism at home.

The word 'Now' is redundant when 'recently' is already used. Removing 'Now' improves sentence clarity and naturalness. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26).

× Maybe I want to share a good news with my father because he's so open minded that he can listen to my opinion and stories carefully.

✓ Maybe I want to share good news with my father because he's so open-minded that he can listen to my opinions and stories carefully.

The phrase 'a good news' is incorrect because 'news' is an uncountable noun and does not take an indefinite article 'a' (ID 14). Also, 'open minded' should be hyphenated as 'open-minded' (ID 13). Additionally, 'opinion' should be plural 'opinions' to match 'stories'.