Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达的意思不够清晰，句子结构有些混乱，建议简化句子并明确表达观点，同时避免重复。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed sharing helps build friendships and shows kindness to others.

提案: 回答内容较为简单，建议增加更多细节描述，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I like to share delicious food with others, especially my colleagues at work. For instance, when I bring snacks to the office, I always offer some to them to create a friendly atmosphere.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议简化句子并使用更准确的表达，同时减少口头语。

例: I believe private matters or personal issues are not suitable for sharing because they should be kept confidential.

提案: 时态使用不当，句子结构混乱，建议使用正确时态并简化表达，使内容更清晰。

例: Recently, I have been sharing my thoughts and work progress with my colleagues because we are busy with projects in November.

提案: 回答较好，但可以通过增加连接词和细节使表达更自然流畅。

例: The first person I would like to share good news with is my mother because she lives with me and always encourages me to follow my dreams.

提案: 回答中时态错误较多，且有口头语，建议使用正确时态并减少重复，使表达更自然。

例: I often share news about my work with my friends. For example, when I finish a project, I tell them so we can celebrate together with a dinner.

× They told me that sharing can make friends and can show you something I like to my friends to others.

✓ They told me that sharing can make friends and can show you something I like to my friends or others.

句中“to others”用法不当，应改为“or others”表示“给我的朋友或其他人”。这是介词使用错误，属于现在分词用法中的介词搭配问题。

× I like to share a delicious food with others.

✓ I like to share delicious food with others.

“food”是不可数名词，前面不应加不定冠词“a”。这是单复数使用错误。

× In my opinion, I think the issues or some private events that that is not suitable for sharing to others.

✓ In my opinion, I think the issues or some private events are not suitable for sharing with others.

“sharing to others”应改为“sharing with others”，介词使用错误。

× I often shared, uh, the things about my work with my friends.

✓ I often share, uh, the things about my work with my friends.

句中描述习惯动作，应使用一般现在时，使用过去时不符合语境。

× So if I finally, uh, finish my project, I was shared with my friends and so that we can have a celebrating dinner together.

✓ So if I finally, uh, finish my project, I share it with my friends so that we can have a celebratory dinner together.

“was shared”被动语态不合适，且时态不一致，应使用主动语态一般现在时。

× so I often shared the work events with my colleagues.

✓ so I often share the work events with my colleagues.

描述经常发生的动作，应使用一般现在时，过去时不合适。