Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "pre". Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể.

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. Since I have an older sister and a younger brother, they always encouraged us to share our toys and snacks with each other to build a strong family bond.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chắc chắn như "umm" và câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để liên kết các ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động và tự nhiên.

例: I like to share both tangible things like toys and delicious meals with my siblings, and intangible things such as my happy or sad stories with my family because it helps us understand each other better.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh dùng từ lặp lại như "uh". Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn, sử dụng các từ nối để làm cho ý tưởng mạch lạc và logic.

例: It depends on who I share with. For my family, I am comfortable sharing everything, including my feelings and experiences. However, with friends, I usually avoid sharing personal or sad stories because they might affect them negatively.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "yeah" và câu trả lời nên được tổ chức tốt hơn với các câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Recently, I have been sharing interesting things I find online. For example, when I come across a funny joke or a hilarious sentence on the internet, I remember it and share it with my family whenever I get the chance.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu đúng, đồng thời tránh lặp từ và nói rõ ràng hơn. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể.

例: It depends on the type of good news. If I achieve something important, I would share it with my family first to make them happy. But for casual news, like my favorite singer releasing a new song, I would share it with my best friend.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như "an unavailable price" không chính xác. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn với các từ nối để liên kết ý tưởng.

例: I usually share casual news with my friends, such as when my favorite singer releases a new song or when I buy something at a great price. Sharing these things helps strengthen our friendship and makes us feel relaxed.

× Guess when I was a child my parents usually teach me how to share with another people.

✓ I guess when I was a child my parents usually taught me how to share with other people.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action, so the verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught'. Also, 'another people' is incorrect; it should be 'other people' because 'people' is plural.

× Guess when I was a child my parents usually teach me how to share with another people.

✓ I guess when I was a child my parents usually taught me how to share with other people.

The preposition 'with' is correctly used here, but 'another people' is incorrect. 'Another' is used with singular countable nouns, while 'people' is plural, so 'other people' is correct.

× Guess when I was a child my parents usually teach me how to share with another people.

✓ I guess when I was a child my parents usually taught me how to share with other people.

'Another' is used with singular nouns, but 'people' is plural, so 'other people' is the correct phrase.

× I have my old sister and a younger brother and it is essential to share with my sister or my pre or my brother actually.

✓ I have an older sister and a younger brother, and it is essential to share with my sister or my brother actually.

'Old sister' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'older sister'. Also, 'pre' seems to be a typo and should be removed. The sentence also needs an article 'an' before 'older sister'.

× I would like to share not only tangible things but also intangible things.

✓ I would like to share not only tangible things but also intangible things.

No correction needed; the modal verb usage is correct here.

× I would like to share toys or umm, delicious meal with my siblings.

✓ I would like to share toys or, umm, delicious meals with my siblings.

'Delicious meal' should be plural 'delicious meals' to match the plural 'toys' and the general context of sharing multiple items.

× I would like to share toys or umm, delicious meal with my siblings.

✓ I would like to share toys or, umm, delicious meals with my siblings.

'Meal' should be plural 'meals' because it refers to multiple instances or types of meals shared.

× Or maybe when I have a sad story or happy story I would like to share with my yeah my family.

✓ Or maybe when I have a sad story or a happy story, I would like to share it with my family.

The pronoun 'it' is needed to refer back to 'story'. Also, 'yeah' is informal and unnecessary here.

× Or maybe when I have a sad story or happy story I would like to share with my yeah my family.

✓ Or maybe when I have a sad story or a happy story, I would like to share it with my family.

The sentence lacks the object pronoun 'it' after 'share' to indicate what is being shared.

× If it was my family, I would like to share everything, uh, what I felt or what I saw.

✓ If it were my family, I would like to share everything, uh, what I felt or what I saw.

In conditional sentences contrary to fact, 'were' is used instead of 'was' for all subjects.

× But if it was my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal story, especially sad story because it, uh, negative impacts them.

✓ But if it were my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal story, especially sad stories because it, uh, negatively impacts them.

Again, 'were' is correct in hypothetical conditionals. Also, 'negative impacts' should be 'negatively impacts' to use the adverb form modifying the verb.

× But if it was my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal story, especially sad story because it, uh, negative impacts them.

✓ But if it were my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal story, especially sad stories because it, uh, negatively impacts them.

The adjective 'negative' should be changed to the adverb 'negatively' to correctly modify the verb 'impacts'.

× But if it was my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal story, especially sad story because it, uh, negative impacts them.

✓ But if it were my friends, I wouldn't tell them about my personal stories, especially sad stories because it, uh, negatively impacts them.

'Story' should be plural 'stories' to match the context of multiple personal or sad stories.

× Yes, I love to share with others something that I saw online.

✓ Yes, I love to share with others things that I see online.

'Something' is singular but the context implies multiple items; also, 'saw' should be present tense 'see' to indicate habitual action.

× Yes, I love to share with others something that I saw online.

✓ Yes, I love to share with others something that I see online.

The present tense 'see' is appropriate here because the action is habitual or general.

× Yeah you know on Internet there variety of entertaining contents.

✓ Yeah, you know on the Internet there is a variety of entertaining content.

'Variety' is singular and requires 'is'. 'Contents' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'content' is correct. Also, 'the Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Yeah you know on Internet there variety of entertaining contents.

✓ Yeah, you know on the Internet there is a variety of entertaining content.

The verb 'is' is needed after 'there' to form the correct 'there is' structure for singular 'variety'.

× Yeah you know on Internet there variety of entertaining contents.

✓ Yeah, you know on the Internet there is a variety of entertaining content.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× So when I see a joke or hilarious sentence I will keep it in mind and share with others, especially my family when I have a chance.

✓ So when I see a joke or a hilarious sentence, I keep it in mind and share it with others, especially my family when I have a chance.

The present simple tense 'keep' and 'share' is better here to express habitual actions. Also, 'share with others' should be 'share it with others' to include the object pronoun.

× So when I see a joke or hilarious sentence I will keep it in mind and share with others, especially my family when I have a chance.

✓ So when I see a joke or a hilarious sentence, I will keep it in mind and share it with others, especially my family when I have a chance.

The object pronoun 'it' is needed after 'share' to indicate what is being shared.

× I think it depends on what type of good news that I have it was if it was a new achievement I would like to share with my family first to make them happy.

✓ I think it depends on what type of good news I have. If it is a new achievement, I would like to share it with my family first to make them happy.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Have' should be present tense, and 'was' should be 'is' to refer to current or general situations. Also, 'that I have it was' is incorrect and should be split into two sentences.

× I think it depends on what type of good news that I have it was if it was a new achievement I would like to share with my family first to make them happy.

✓ I think it depends on what type of good news I have. If it is a new achievement, I would like to share it with my family first to make them happy.

The pronoun 'it' is needed after 'share' to specify what is being shared.

× But if it was just a a common good news like my I don't release a new song I would like to share with my best.

✓ But if it is just common good news, like my idol releasing a new song, I would like to share it with my best friend.

'Was' should be 'is' for present or general situations. The phrase 'my I don't release a new song' is unclear and corrected to 'my idol releasing a new song'. Also, 'best' is incomplete and corrected to 'best friend'.

× But if it was just a a common good news like my I don't release a new song I would like to share with my best.

✓ But if it is just common good news, like my idol releasing a new song, I would like to share it with my best friend.

The pronoun 'it' is needed after 'share' to specify what is being shared. Also, 'best' should be 'best friend' for clarity.

× What kind of news do you share with your friends?

✓ What kind of news do you share with your friends?

No correction needed; 'news' is uncountable and correctly used.

× I would like to share with my friends something casual such as my idol just released a new song or I just bought something an unavailable price because it will reinforce our connection and help us relax.

✓ I would like to share with my friends something casual, such as my idol just releasing a new song or something I just bought at an affordable price, because it will reinforce our connection and help us relax.

The phrase 'something an unavailable price' is incorrect. It should be 'something I just bought at an affordable price'. Also, 'just released' is changed to 'just releasing' to maintain parallel structure.