Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by adding a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly and by slightly expanding with a specific example to enrich the content.

例: Yes, definitely. My parents encouraged me to share my food and toys with my friends because they believed it was an important value to develop generosity. For instance, they often reminded me to offer my snacks during playtime, which helped me build strong friendships.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor grammar issues and using linking words to make the response more coherent.

例: Well, I really enjoy sharing my homemade food, such as traditional sweets, with my friends and family because it brings us closer and creates a joyful atmosphere during gatherings.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to express contrast effectively.

例: Well, although sharing is generally positive because it brings happiness, some things are not suitable for sharing. For example, private matters like money or personal information should be kept confidential.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and clear. To improve, you could add a linking phrase to connect your ideas more smoothly and provide a bit more detail about your feelings or plans.

例: I guess the thing I want to share most recently is my plan to move abroad. I have been telling my friends and family about it because it's a big change in my life, and I want their support and advice during this exciting time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has a grammatical error and could be improved by specifying one person first and then mentioning others, using linking words for clarity.

例: Well, the first person I would like to share good news with is my best friend because they always create a supportive and encouraging environment. After that, I usually tell my family.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

例: I usually share both positive and negative news with my friends because they are very supportive and always encourage me to stay motivated during difficult times.

× My parents encouraged me to share my food and toys with my friends because they believe it was an important value to develop generosity.

✓ My parents encouraged me to share my food and toys with my friends because they believed it was an important value to develop generosity.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since 'encouraged' is past tense, 'believe' should also be in past tense 'believed' to maintain tense consistency.

× Well, I really enjoy sharing my homemade food like traditional sweets with my friends and family because it brings us closer and creates A joyful atmosphere.

✓ Well, I really enjoy sharing my homemade food like traditional sweets with my friends and family because it brings us closer and creates a joyful atmosphere.

The article 'A' is incorrectly capitalized. Articles should be in lowercase unless at the beginning of a sentence.

× Well, I believe that sharing is generally a positive thing because it brings happier while some things are not suitable for sharing, for example private things like money or information.

✓ Well, I believe that sharing is generally a positive thing because it brings happiness, while some things are not suitable for sharing, for example private things like money or information.

The phrase 'it brings happier' is incorrect; 'happier' is a comparative adjective and cannot be used as a noun. The correct noun form is 'happiness'. Also, the sentence structure improves with a comma before 'while'.

× I guess the thing I want to share most recently is about the plan to move abroad.

✓ I guess the thing I want to share most recently has been about the plan to move abroad.

The phrase 'want to share most recently' mixes present desire with a recent past event. Using present perfect 'has been' better reflects the recent sharing action.

× Well, the first person I would like to share good news with my friends and family because they always create a supportive and encouraging environment.

✓ Well, the first people I would like to share good news with are my friends and family because they always create a supportive and encouraging environment.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'with' and 'person' should be plural 'people' to match 'friends and family'. This corrects sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.

× I usually share both positive and negative things with my friends because they are very supporting and always encourage me to stay motivated.

✓ I usually share both positive and negative things with my friends because they are very supportive and always encourage me to stay motivated.

The adjective 'supporting' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective to describe people who provide support is 'supportive'.