Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, complete your sentences fully to avoid leaving thoughts unfinished. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my belongings, such as snacks, toys, and books, with my friends because they believed it helps develop communication and social skills in me.

提案: Reduce the use of filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about what knowledge you share and how it helps others.

例: I usually share my knowledge because I work in a lab and like to help my colleagues troubleshoot problems. However, I also don't mind sharing my books with others.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow. Use plural forms correctly and add linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about reasons why these items are unsuitable for sharing.

例: Some belongings, such as toothbrushes and smartphones, are completely private. Sharing them is not reasonable due to health concerns and privacy issues.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain reasons clearly. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar, such as 'leave' should be 'living'.

例: Recently, I shared my apartment with a colleague who recently joined our lab because she couldn't find a suitable place to live. Now, she lives in my apartment.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Complete your sentences fully and use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas. Be specific about why you share news with your mom.

例: My mom is always the first person I want to share good news with. Also, when something disappointing happens, I like to talk to her because she understands me well.

提案: Avoid filler words and complete your sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'especially' to clarify your points. Be more specific about the types of results you share and why.

例: Since my friends have the same job as me, I often share the results of my experiments with them, especially when I get really good and satisfying results.

× Yes, always my parents, umm, encouraged me to share my belongings like snacks, my toys and books, uh, with my friend, uh, because they believe that it is a great way to develop communication skills and social skills, uh, in me. And always they appreci.

✓ Yes, always my parents, umm, encouraged me to share my belongings like snacks, my toys and books, uh, with my friends, uh, because they believe that it is a great way to develop communication skills and social skills, uh, in me. And always they appreciate.

The word 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the plural possessive 'my belongings' and the context of sharing with more than one person. Also, 'appreci' is incomplete and should be corrected to 'appreciate' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. This is a subject-verb agreement and pluralization issue.

× Usually I share my knowledge, uh, because I work in the lab, uh, I try to be open minded people and I like to help them in troubleshooting. But uh, on the other hand, I don't have any problem to share, uh, my book.

✓ Usually I share my knowledge, uh, because I work in the lab, uh, I try to be an open-minded person and I like to help them in troubleshooting. But uh, on the other hand, I don't have any problem sharing, uh, my book.

The phrase 'I try to be open minded people' is incorrect because 'I' is singular and 'people' is plural. It should be 'an open-minded person'. Also, 'I don't have any problem to share' should be 'I don't have any problem sharing' to use the correct verb form after 'problem'.

× Umm, some of our belongings like umm, toothbrush, they're completely, or our smartphone, uh, they're completely private things and sharing them is not, umm, rational from health and maybe, uh, privacy point of view.

✓ Umm, some of our belongings like umm, toothbrushes, they're completely, or our smartphones, uh, they're completely private things and sharing them is not, umm, rational from a health and maybe, uh, privacy point of view.

The singular nouns 'toothbrush' and 'smartphone' should be plural 'toothbrushes' and 'smartphones' to agree with 'some of our belongings' which is plural. Also, 'from health and maybe privacy point of view' needs the article 'a' before 'health' to be grammatically correct.

× Uh, I have shared my apartment with one of, uh, our colleagues that, uh, she's joined, uh, she has joined our lab recently because, umm, she couldn't find a suitable place for leave. And now, uh, she lives in my apartment and I gave her.

✓ Uh, I have shared my apartment with one of, uh, our colleagues who, uh, has joined, uh, our lab recently because, umm, she couldn't find a suitable place to live. And now, uh, she lives in my apartment and I let her stay.

The relative pronoun 'that' should be 'who' when referring to a person. 'She's joined' and 'she has joined' are redundant; use one. 'Place for leave' is incorrect; it should be 'place to live'. The phrase 'I gave her' is incomplete; it should be 'I let her stay' or similar to complete the meaning.

× My mom, my mom is, she's always, she's the first person that I would like to share good news with her and on the other hand, sometimes if something happened that, umm, it is disappointing for me again, I like to talk to my mom uh, because, uh, all.

✓ My mom, my mom is, she's always, she's the first person that I would like to share good news with and on the other hand, sometimes if something happens that, umm, is disappointing for me, again, I like to talk to my mom uh, because, uh, all.

The phrase 'share good news with her' is incorrect because 'with' already includes the object; 'her' is redundant and should be omitted. Also, 'if something happened' should be 'if something happens' to maintain present tense consistency. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as much as possible.

× Since, uh, my friend, uh, they have the same job like me, most of the time I share the result of my experiments with them, especially when I have a, umm, really good results, their satisfying results, uh, I share my.

✓ Since, uh, my friends, uh, they have the same job as me, most of the time I share the results of my experiments with them, especially when I have, umm, really good results, their satisfying results, uh, I share my.

The singular 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to agree with the plural pronoun 'they' and 'them'. 'Like me' should be 'as me' for correct comparison. 'Result' should be plural 'results' to match 'experiments' and the context. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as much as possible.