Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid repetition and filler words like 'I I' and 'so I I'm'. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share since I grew up with two siblings, a younger brother and an older sister. I was used to sharing mostly with my brother, but less with my sister.

提案: Try to avoid hesitation and filler phrases like 'I don't know' and repeated words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and be more specific about the memories you share.

例: When I'm at university with my friends, I usually share food because it's polite. Besides that, I enjoy sharing memorable experiences, like trips or special events, with them.

提案: Avoid repeating the same ideas and words. Try to make your answer more concise and natural by combining sentences and using linking words. Also, be careful with grammar, for example, 'sharing my toothbrush' instead of 'share sharing'.

例: Personally, I think items like toothbrushes and undergarments are not suitable for sharing because they are personal and unhygienic.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammar mistakes, such as 'wish I had it'. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, recently I met some friends and brought a pizza to share with them. We enjoyed eating together and had a great time.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition like 'something that something' and by making sentences more concise and natural. Also, avoid ending with 'Yeah' which sounds informal in this context.

例: The first person I share good news with is my older sister because we are very close, and I admire and respect her.

提案: Avoid repetition like 'what I what I' and be more specific in your answer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your answer more natural and fluent.

例: I usually share daily news with my friends, like what I did during the day, what I ate, or how I performed in my recent exams.

× I have a younger brother and an older sister so I I'm always used to sharing things with them.

✓ I have a younger brother and an older sister, so I'm always used to sharing things with them.

The original sentence has a repeated subject 'I' and an unnecessary auxiliary verb 'am' before 'used to'. The phrase 'used to' here means accustomed to, so it should be 'I'm always used to sharing things with them.' Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses properly.

× I'm not keen to share sharing my toothbrush or my undergarment with someone else.

✓ I'm not keen on sharing my toothbrush or my undergarments with someone else.

The phrase 'keen to share sharing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'keen on sharing' followed by the gerund form of the verb. Also, 'undergarment' should be plural 'undergarments' to match the context.

× I met with a few friends yesterday and we were there to hang out and chill and I brought a pizza for them to eat and wish I had it and we had a lot of fun.

✓ I met with a few friends yesterday, and we hung out and chilled. I brought a pizza for them to eat, and I wish I had some too. We had a lot of fun.

The original sentence is a run-on with incorrect verb forms and unclear phrasing. 'We were there to hang out and chill' is better as 'we hung out and chilled' to use simple past tense consistently. 'Wish I had it' is unclear; it should be 'I wish I had some too' to express desire. Commas and periods are added to separate ideas clearly.