Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法不完整和重复表达，且使用了过多的填充词“uh”，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连贯的表达方式。

例: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They encouraged me to share my toys and snacks because they believed sharing shows kindness and helps build good relationships.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，建议注意句子结构和时态的正确使用，同时增加连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I enjoy sharing delicious food with others because I love seeing their enjoyment. Since I was about 3 or 4 years old, I have liked sharing my favorite snacks with other children.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议避免使用模糊的表达，明确说明观点，并使用正确的语法结构。

例: I think some things, like family love, are not suitable for sharing because they are personal and private. For example, I would feel uncomfortable if I tried to share my mother's love with my younger brother.

提案: 回答中句子结构混乱，表达不连贯，建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更清晰。

例: Yes, recently I shared a special dish from my hometown, beef soup, with my good friend. That night, I explained the benefits of beef soup, and my friend really enjoyed it.

提案: 回答未完成且存在重复，建议完整表达观点，避免重复，并使用连贯的句子。

例: The first person I would like to share good news with is my best friend. We have known each other since we were about 11 or 12 years old. She is a good listener, and I always feel comfortable talking to her.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议完整表达想法，注意时态和句子结构，避免使用填充词。

例: I mostly share personal matters with my friends, such as when I am happy or sad. I also like to share delicious food with them.

× I enjoy sharing delicious food what I like to others.

✓ I enjoy sharing delicious food that I like with others.

句中使用了错误的关系代词“what”，应使用“that”来引导定语从句，且介词“with”应放在“others”之前，表示“与别人分享”。

× I very love watching them when they enjoy my food.

✓ I really love watching them when they enjoy my food.

“very”不能修饰动词“love”，应使用副词“really”来修饰动词。

× Since I was around 3 or 4 years old, I like to share my favorite snacks with other children.

✓ Since I was around 3 or 4 years old, I have liked to share my favorite snacks with other children.

句子描述从过去某时开始持续到现在的动作，需使用现在完成时“have liked”，而非一般现在时“like”。

× For example, I if I try to sharing my mom's love with my younger brother, I feel uncomfortable and some bad emotions.

✓ For example, if I try to share my mom's love with my younger brother, I feel uncomfortable and have some bad emotions.

动词“try”后应接动词原形“share”，而非动名词“sharing”。

× Yes, recently I shared a special dish from my hometown with my good friend that was beef soup and I that night I explained the benefits of beef soup and my friends would very like to share to enjoy it.

✓ Yes, recently I shared a special dish from my hometown with my good friend; it was beef soup. That night, I explained the benefits of beef soup, and my friends really liked sharing and enjoying it.

句子中时态混乱，需统一使用过去时态；“would very like”表达错误，应改为“really liked”；“share to enjoy”表达不当，应改为“sharing and enjoying”。

× The first person I would like to share good news with is my best friend. We know each other when we were teenagers, around 11 or 1212 years old.

✓ The first person I would like to share good news with is my best friend. We met each other when we were teenagers, around 11 or 12 years old.

“know each other”表示现在认识，描述过去应使用过去时“met each other”；“1212”应为“12”。

× She is a good listener, she always listens to me and I feel so comfortable and.

✓ She is a good listener; she always listens to me, and I feel so comfortable with her.

原句为逗号拼接的两个独立句，需用分号或句号分开；句尾“and”后缺少内容，应补充完整。

× Mostly my personal matters, uh, for example, when I was happy or sad, I just like to share with them and if I taking some delicious food, I always.

✓ Mostly my personal matters, uh, for example, when I was happy or sad, I just like to share with them, and if I am eating some delicious food, I always share it.

“if I taking”语法错误，应为“if I am eating”；句尾不完整，需补充完整句子。