Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去形の使い方や主語と動詞の一致に注意し、簡潔で自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I don't remember my parents teaching me to share when I was a child, but I learned a lot about sharing at school.

提案: 文法ミスと不自然な表現があります。複数形の使い方や文章のつながりを改善し、より自然な英語にしましょう。

例: I like to share my experiences and emotions. When I have good experiences, I usually post them on Instagram to share with my friends.

提案: 意味が不明瞭で文が途中で終わっています。理由を明確に述べ、完全な文で答える練習をしましょう。

例: I think people should avoid sharing private or sensitive news because it might upset others or invade someone's privacy.

提案: 文のつながりが不自然で、時制の使い方に注意が必要です。より流暢で自然な表現を目指しましょう。

例: Yes, I recently got married and posted about it on Instagram to share the news with my friends. They congratulated me and my wife.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。正しい表現と理由の説明を明確にしましょう。

例: I would like to share good news with my wife first because we have a close and easy relationship.

提案: 文法的に誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。伝えたい内容を明確にし、正しい文法で表現する練習をしましょう。

例: Most of the news I share with my friends is happy news because I don't feel comfortable sharing negative things with them.

× I can't remember that my parents teach me to share when I was a child, but.

✓ I can't remember that my parents taught me to share when I was a child, but.

The verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'. Using present tense 'teach' here is incorrect.

× One of my favorite sharing is my experience and emotions.

✓ One of my favorite things to share is my experience and emotions.

The word 'sharing' is incorrectly used as a noun here. It should be 'things to share' to correctly express the idea. Also, 'experience' should be singular to match 'one of my favorite things'.

× When I have a good experiences.

✓ When I have good experiences.

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'experiences'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× I'd say that people should not share that news with the others because.

✓ I'd say that people should not share that news with others because.

The phrase 'the others' is incorrect here; 'others' without 'the' is appropriate. Also, the sentence fragment ends abruptly and should be completed for clarity.

× People who watched the post of that news. Were also.

✓ People who saw the post of that news were also affected.

The verb 'watched' is not appropriate for 'post'; 'saw' is better. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished to make sense.

× Yes, when I got married.

✓ Yes, when I got married,

The sentence is incomplete and should be connected to the next clause with a comma for proper sentence structure.

× I post about it on Instagram and share with my friends.

✓ I posted about it on Instagram and shared with my friends.

Since the event 'got married' is in the past, the verbs 'post' and 'share' should also be in the past tense to maintain tense consistency.

× They celebrate me and my wife.

✓ They celebrated my wife and me.

The pronoun order should be 'my wife and me' as the object of the verb. Also, 'celebrate' should be past tense 'celebrated' to match the past event.

× I think that I'd like to convey my wife if I have a good news.

✓ I think that I'd like to tell my wife if I have good news.

The verb 'convey' is not typically used with a person as an object; 'tell' is more appropriate. Also, 'a good news' is incorrect because 'news' is uncountable; it should be 'good news' without 'a'.

× That's because my family can interact with each other with ease.

✓ That's because my family can interact with one another with ease.

'Each other' is used for two people, while 'one another' is used for more than two. Since 'family' implies more than two members, 'one another' is more appropriate.

× The almost news I shared with my friends is happiness.

✓ Almost all the news I share with my friends is happy.

'The almost news' is incorrect; 'almost all the news' is the correct quantifier phrase. Also, 'happiness' should be 'happy' to describe the news.

× Because. I can't find it feel comfortable for other people.

✓ Because I can't find it comfortable for other people.

The phrase 'find it feel comfortable' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'find it comfortable'. Also, the sentence fragment should be connected properly.