Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，如“build better relationship”应为“build better relationships”，且“sharing is a generous personality”表达不准确。建议注意语法和用词的准确性，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, my parents always taught me that sharing is very important because it helps build better relationships with others. Moreover, being generous by sharing can positively influence my future.

提案: 回答较好，但可以增加更多细节和连接词，使表达更连贯丰富。比如说明为什么交换衣服能加强关系。

例: I often share physical items with people I trust. For instance, my best friend and I frequently exchange clothes, which helps us bond and express our personal styles.

提案: 表达中存在逻辑不清和语法错误，如“if they have a better relationship than me”不明确。建议理清逻辑，使用更准确的表达，并避免重复。

例: I believe personal relationships should not be shared because they are private. For example, I wouldn't share my boyfriend with others as it could hurt my feelings.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法错误较多，如“filled with all my doors”不合逻辑。建议理清思路，使用正确的词汇和句式，表达清晰具体。

例: Yes, recently I shared a delicate collectible with my friends. I have a big cabinet in my bedroom full of collectibles, and since they liked one of them, I gave it to a friend.

提案: 回答较好，但时态不一致，如“was”应为“is”，且句子较长，建议适当拆分句子，使表达更清晰。

例: Definitely my best friend. She always supports and encourages me in many ways. I believe my achievements are largely thanks to her, so she is the first person I want to share good news with.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“I performs”应为“I perform”，“I I”重复。建议注意语法和句子结构，表达更准确自然。

例: I usually prefer to share good news with my friends because they praise me when I perform well. However, I tend to keep bad news to myself to avoid making them feel upset.

× They believed it could build better relationship with others.

✓ They believed it could build better relationships with others.

relationship 是可数名词，表示关系，复数形式为 relationships。这里指多种关系，需用复数形式。

× sharing is a generous personality which can contribute to my future.

✓ sharing is a generous personality trait which can contribute to my future.

generous 是形容词，不能直接修饰 personality，需用 personality trait 表示“性格特征”。

× in my bedroom there is a big cabinet and it is filled with all my doors.

✓ in my bedroom there is a big cabinet and it is filled with all my dolls.

doors 是门，语境应为收藏品，推测应为 dolls（玩偶），原词拼写错误。

× I shared one of them to my friend.

✓ I shared one of them with my friend.

share 后面搭配介词 with 表示“与某人分享”，不能用 to。

× if I performs well.

✓ if I perform well.

主语是第一人称 I，动词不加 s，perform 保持原形。

× because I wanted to avoid them feel upset.

✓ because I wanted to avoid them feeling upset.

avoid 后应接动名词形式，表示避免某事发生，故用 feeling。