Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接並用正確語法，避免多餘的填充詞（如 uh）。主句要清晰，補充細節用連接詞並控制在五句內。可改進語法（father's → father）與單複數（ways → way），並補充一個具體例子說明分享如何促進友誼。

例: Yes. My father taught me to share when I was a child because sharing snacks helped me make friends. For example, I used to bring cookies to school and offer them to classmates, which made it easier to start conversations and join groups.

提案: 回答中有重複（I really like chocolate cookies）與未完成句子（It takes really crispy and.），需用連接詞組織句子並提供具體細節。避免說 send（不合語境）改用 share 或 give，並完成描述食物的特點。

例: I usually share snacks with my friends, especially my favorite chocolate cookies, because I want them to enjoy what I like. The cookies are crunchy and sweet, so they are easy to share during breaks at university.

提案: 回答主旨明確但語法錯誤多、表達混亂。使用更恰當的表達（例如 personal items, private）並修正語法（is → are, depends → dependent）。刪除冗詞並用一兩句具體列舉不可分享的物品與原因。

例: I think personal items like underwear or toothbrushes are not suitable for sharing because they are private and can spread germs. In contrast, things like snacks or books are fine to share.

提案: 回答要用正確時態和更自然的句型（最近應用 present perfect 或過去式），例如 'Recently I shared…' 或 'I've been sharing…'。注意數詞與搭配（at the same times → at the same time），並可增加具體細節如書名或如何分配時間。

例: Recently I have been sharing textbooks with my classmates because we study the same major and want to save money. For example, we take turns borrowing the finance textbook and study it together on weekends.

提案: 保持主句清晰並修正語法（is very supported me → supports me; get a great excited → gets very excited; all the night → all night）。可補充一兩個細節說明原因，如她的反應或對你的重要性，控制在三到四句內。

例: I would tell my girlfriend first because she always supports me and gets very excited about my successes. For example, when I passed an important exam last year she celebrated with me all night and encouraged me to keep studying.

提案: 回答需修正語法並避免不必要的片語（for to）。說明分享的新聞類型（academic, personal, job-related）並提供具體例子與連接詞來組織句子。保持句子數量在三到五句之間。

例: I usually share good news with my friends, such as exam results or achievements, because they support me and we like to celebrate together. For example, after I finished a difficult assignment recently, we went out for dinner to celebrate.

× Yes I did when I was young my father's always told me I need to share my snacks to my friends because it is the great ways to uh, connect with your friends and to have the opportunity to.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was young, my father always told me I needed to share my snacks with my friends because it is a great way to connect with them and to have opportunities.

问题类型：第三人称单数（第三人称动词形式）和时态不一致。原句中“my father's always told me I need”中“father's”误用为缩写并且后面动词形式与过去时不一致；应为“my father always told me I needed...”。另外“ways”应为单数“way”，“to my friends”应为“with my friends”。建议：注意主语与动词的一致性，过去报述的内容用过去式或过去式从句（I needed）。将“share... to”改为正确短语“share... with”。

× Sometimes I like to send my snacks, especially the my favorite food to my friends such as chocolate cookies because I really like chocolate cookies and I want to share this happiness to my friends. It takes really crispy and.

✓ Sometimes I like to give my snacks, especially my favorite foods, to my friends, such as chocolate cookies, because I really like them and want to share this happiness with my friends. They are really crispy.

问题类型：动词+ing形式和词汇搭配不当。原句中“like to send my snacks”用词不自然，应用“give”或“share”；“the my favorite food”有多余定冠词并且单复数不一致；“share... to”应为“share... with”；“It takes really crispy and.”语法不完整，应改为复数主语“They are really crispy.” 建议：用正确动词搭配（give/share），注意定冠词和单复数一致，使用完整句子描述食物的特性。

× Well, that is interesting. I think my underwear is not suitable for sharing because those things are too, uh, personal and is too depends on my privacy. So I think those things have these features is lots of good things to sharing.

✓ Well, that is interesting. I think underwear is not suitable for sharing because it is too personal and depends on my privacy. So I think those items have these features and are not suitable for sharing.

问题类型：代词使用错误、主谓一致和冗余。原句中“my underwear... those things”代词指代混乱且不一致；“is too depends”动词形式错误且有两个谓语；“have these features is lots of good things to sharing”结构混乱且“to sharing”错误。建议：保持代词一致（使用it/they或underwear），注意主谓一致，用清晰的句子表达否定意图，改用“not suitable for sharing”。

× Well recently that I share my books to my friends because we have the same majors and we want to save the money, so we read the same book at the same times.

✓ Well, recently I shared my books with my friends because we have the same major and want to save money, so we read the same books at the same time.

问题类型：现在时/过去时使用问题与介词错误。原句“recently that I share”时态错误且不需要“that”；分享发生在最近应使用过去时“shared”；“share... to”应为“share... with”；“majors”应为单数“major”用于共同专业；“the money”不需要定冠词；“same book at the same times”复数和时间短语错误，应为“same books at the same time”。建议：根据时间标志选择正确时态，使用正确介词“with”，注意名词单复数和固定短语“at the same time”。

× Well, I will share the good news with my girlfriend first because she is very supported me and always uh get a great excited for me. For example, I passed my exam last year, she celebrated with me all the night.

✓ Well, I will share the good news with my girlfriend first because she is very supportive and always gets very excited for me. For example, when I passed my exam last year, she celebrated with me all night.

问题类型：代词/形容词和动词形式错误。原句中“she is very supported me”语序和词性错误，应为形容词“supportive”；“always uh get a great excited for me”动词和形容词形式也错，应为“always gets very excited for me”；“all the night”习惯用法应为“all night”。建议：注意形容词与动词的正确用法，主谓一致（第三人称单数加-s），使用地道短语“all night”。

× I think I like to share the good news for to my friends because they are support me a lot and we like to have a party for the great news. For example, the last time I finished my homework and we celebrated.

✓ I think I like to share good news with my friends because they support me a lot and we like to have a party for great news. For example, last time I finished my homework, and we celebrated.

问题类型：介词使用错误与主谓一致。原句中“share the good news for to my friends”中多余且错误的介词，应为“share... with”；“they are support me”主谓结构错误，应为“they support me”；“for the great news”可简化为“for great news”；句尾缺少时间连接词和完整结构，改为“last time I finished... , and we celebrated.”建议：使用正确介词“with”，保持主谓一致，句子保持简洁和完整。