Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并保持连贯。先给出直接回答，再用1-2句具体细节支持。注意主语一致（“they”指代不明）。避免无关信息，如“they think hard work is essential”与分享无关。可以说是谁教你的、通过什么方式学会的。

例: Not really. My parents didn't teach me explicitly to share; I picked it up at school and from friends during group activities like team projects and lunchtime. For example, classmates would offer snacks and we learned to take turns, which helped me develop the habit.

提案: 回答需要结构清晰和句子完整。先给主题句（我喜欢分享什么），然后提供具体例子和场景。避免语法错误和多余短语。使用连词（for example, such as）使内容连贯。

例: I like to share food with friends and family, especially dishes I enjoy. For example, when I try a new dessert at a restaurant I often offer a bite to my friends so we can talk about the taste together.

提案: 回答要更具体并完成句子。先给明确主题句，然后列举具体例子并说明原因。避免停顿词和不完整句。可以说明哪些信息不安全以及分享的潜在后果。

例: Sensitive personal information should not be shared because it can lead to fraud. For instance, you should never share your ID number, bank card details, or passwords with friends since that could result in identity theft or financial loss.

提案: 回答结构不错但可更具体。说明书名或主题、为什么值得分享以及你们如何讨论。使用衔接词（for example, because）增加逻辑性並控制句子数量在5句内。

例: Yes, I recently lent a novel called The Alchemist to a friend because its themes about goals and personal growth resonated with me. We discussed the main ideas over coffee, which made the story more meaningful for both of us.

提案: 回答要流畅并完整表达原因。先陈述对象，然后解释原因并给出例子。避免不完整句和重复。可以说明她是如何支持你的。

例: I would share good news with my mother first because she always supports my decisions and encourages me. For example, when I got a scholarship last year, she was the first person I called and she celebrated with me and offered helpful advice.

提案: 回答需用自然表达并避免断断续续和口头禅。先给主题句（我分享哪类新闻），然后列举具体类型和原因或一个例子。使用连词使句子流畅。

例: I usually share entertainment news with my friends, such as new movie releases or interesting TV series. For instance, if I watch a great film, I’ll tell them why I liked it and recommend it, so we can decide whether to watch it together.

× My parents didn't directly teach me to share when I was a child. I learned it from school and friends. They think hard work is essential.

✓ My parents didn't directly teach me to share when I was a child. I learned it from school and friends. They thought hard work was essential.

句中第三句使用現在式 'think' 與前文描述童年事件的過去時態不一致，應使用過去式 'thought' 表示過去的看法。建議保持時態一致，描述過去經歷時整段使用過去式。

× I like to share food with my friends who can is interesting things I enjoy sometimes I always share the dishes with my family or friends. It's a good time.

✓ I like to share food and interesting things with my friends. Sometimes I always share the dishes with my family or friends. It's a good time.

原句中 'who can is interesting things' 結構混亂且動詞形式錯誤。將句子拆分並用名詞短語 'interesting things' 與動詞 'share' 搭配，避免多餘或錯誤的動詞形式。注意使用清晰的並列結構和適當標點。

× Personal information isn't suit for sharing. I think it is not safe such as card and bank card. Uh, don't share with your friends because.

✓ Personal information isn't suitable for sharing. I think it is not safe, such as bank cards and credit card details. Don't share them with your friends.

原句中 'isn't suit' 應使用形容詞 'suitable'；'card and bank card' 用詞重複且不精確，應寫明 'bank cards and credit card details'。最後一句要有完整賓語 'them' 以指代前文的個人信息。建議注意形容詞和名詞短語的正確搭配及句子完整性。

× I recently share a book with my friends. The book is very interesting. I think it is essential to share with my friend and talk about with them.

✓ I recently shared a book with my friends. The book was very interesting. I think it is essential to share with my friends and talk about it with them.

句首 'recently' 描述的是已發生的動作，應使用過去式 'shared'；第二句描述該書的特性可用過去式 'was'（若仍在看的話也可用現在式 'is'），第三句中 'friend' 應為複數 'friends' 並補上代詞 'it' 作為 'talk about' 的賓語。注意時態一致與代詞使用。

× My mom is the first person ever I would like to share good news because she always support me anything I do and I often. Show a.

✓ My mom is the first person I would like to share good news with because she always supports me in anything I do and I often show her my feelings.

動詞 'support' 在第三人稱單數主語 'she' 時需加 -s：'supports'。'first person ever I would like to share good news' 語序不自然，應為 'first person I would like to share good news with'。'support me anything I do' 缺介詞 'in'，且最後一句不完整，補為 'show her my feelings' 或其他具體表達。建議注意第三人稱單數動詞變化、介詞搭配及句子完整性。

× I shall entertainment views with my friend. Usually I uh, like movies and uh TV's. I think uh, sometimes it is uh, good, uh, topic to share, share with them.

✓ I share entertainment views with my friends. Usually I like movies and TV shows. I think sometimes they are good topics to share with them.

原句中 'shall entertainment views' 用法錯誤，應用動詞 'share' 並標明對象複數 'friends'。'TV's' 非正式且錯誤，應用 'TV shows'。'it is...topic' 主語與謂語不匹配，應為複數 'they are good topics' 或 'it is a good topic'。建議使用正確動詞搭配、複數形式以及更自然的名詞表達。