Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、具体的な頻度を明確に述べるとより良いです。例えば、週に何回かなど具体的な数字を入れてください。

例: I adore watching movies and usually watch them two or three times a week during my free time.

提案: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現があります。文を短くし、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げましょう。また、具体的な理由や感情を明確に述べてください。

例: I usually watch horror movies because they give me a thrilling feeling. I enjoy watching them with my boyfriend while eating popcorn.

提案: 文法と語彙の選択に注意し、より自然な表現を使いましょう。接続詞を使って理由を明確にし、具体的な説明を加えてください。

例: I personally prefer the cinema because I can enjoy the atmosphere, watch on a big screen, and listen to loud music. Also, sharing the experience with other audiences makes it more enjoyable.

提案: 文法の誤りを直し、接続詞を使って文をつなげ、内容を明確にしましょう。具体的な効果や理由を詳しく述べてください。

例: Yes, I think it is useful. I watch movies in English and Japanese because it helps me remember vocabulary, improve my speaking skills, and enjoy learning about new cultures.

× I usually watch horror movies, it gives me a chill and satisfaction while I watching my horror movies I have to watch with my boyfriend and my popcorns.

✓ I usually watch horror movies; they give me a chill and satisfaction while I watch my horror movies with my boyfriend and my popcorn.

The phrase 'while I watching' is incorrect because after 'while' we need the base verb form with '-ing' as a gerund or a clause with a subject and verb. Here, 'while I watch' is correct. Also, 'popcorns' is incorrect because 'popcorn' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Use 'popcorn' instead. Additionally, the sentence is a run-on and should be separated properly, for example, using a semicolon or period.

× I usually watch horror movies, it gives me a chill and satisfaction while I watching my horror movies I have to watch with my boyfriend and my popcorns.

✓ I usually watch horror movies; they give me a chill and satisfaction while I watch my horror movies with my boyfriend and my popcorn.

The word 'popcorns' is incorrect because 'popcorn' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Use 'popcorn' without 's'.

× I personally prefer cinema because I can feel atmosphere and can watch through wild screen and loud music and can share my feelings with other audiences.

✓ I personally prefer the cinema because I can feel the atmosphere and watch on a wide screen with loud music and share my feelings with other audiences.

The phrase 'watch through wild screen' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' for screens, and 'wild' should be 'wide'. Also, 'feel atmosphere' needs the definite article 'the' before 'atmosphere'. 'With loud music' is better than 'and loud music' to connect the ideas properly.

× I personally prefer cinema because I can feel atmosphere and can watch through wild screen and loud music and can share my feelings with other audiences.

✓ I personally prefer the cinema because I can feel the atmosphere and watch on a wide screen with loud music and share my feelings with other audiences.

The noun 'cinema' and 'atmosphere' require the definite article 'the' because they refer to specific things known to the speaker and listener. Also, 'wide screen' needs the article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun.

× Yes, personal. Personally I watch movies in English and Japanese. It helps me to remember my words and improve my speaking skills and enjoys a new culture.

✓ Yes, personally, I watch movies in English and Japanese. It helps me remember vocabulary, improve my speaking skills, and enjoy a new culture.

The first sentence 'Yes, personal.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'Yes, personally,' to express the speaker's opinion. Also, 'helps me to remember my words' is better as 'helps me remember vocabulary' for clarity. The phrase 'and enjoys a new culture' is incorrect because the subject is 'It' referring to watching movies, so it should be 'and enjoy a new culture' to maintain parallel structure.