Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add a brief explanation. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, say "I watch movies occasionally because I'm not a big fan of them."

例: I watch movies occasionally because I'm not a big fan of them. However, when I do watch, I usually choose films that interest me.

提案: Be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'. For example, "I usually watch action and comedy films because they entertain me and help me relax."

例: I usually watch action and comedy films because they entertain me and help me relax after a busy day.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. For example, "I prefer watching movies at home because it's more comfortable and I can enjoy the film without interruptions."

例: I prefer watching movies at home because it's more comfortable and I can enjoy the film without interruptions from others.

提案: Expand your answer with linking words and specific details. For example, "Yes, definitely. Watching movies in other languages helps us learn new vocabulary and understand different cultures better."

例: Yes, definitely. Watching movies in other languages helps us learn new vocabulary and understand different cultures better, which broadens our perspective.

× I see films so occasionally it depends on sometime my most because I'm not a big fan of movies that's why occasionally.

✓ I watch films only occasionally; it depends sometimes because I'm not a big fan of movies, that's why I watch them occasionally.

The original sentence has a confusing structure and word order, making it difficult to understand. The correction rearranges the sentence to a clearer and grammatically correct form, using proper conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas clearly.

× I like to see films related to actions and uh, most of the time comedy because uh, I love to watch comedy films.

✓ I like to watch action films and, most of the time, comedies because I love to watch comedy films.

The phrase 'films related to actions' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'action films'. Also, 'comedy' should be pluralised to 'comedies' when referring to the genre generally. The correction improves preposition use and noun form.

× Uh, it's a good time pass and it refresh my mind.

✓ Uh, it's a good way to pass time and it refreshes my mind.

'Time pass' is an incorrect phrase; 'a good way to pass time' is correct. Also, 'refresh' should be in third person singular form 'refreshes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Uh, I think so. Uh, watching movies at home is uh, far better than watching in cinema, uh, because uh, we can comfortably see films, Uh, no one can just stop and in a comfy place and having good time.

✓ Uh, I think so. Watching movies at home is far better than watching in the cinema because we can comfortably watch films, no one can interrupt, and it's a comfy place to have a good time.

The phrase 'watching in cinema' needs the definite article 'the' before 'cinema'. 'See films' is better expressed as 'watch films'. 'No one can just stop' is unclear; 'no one can interrupt' is clearer. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, definitely. It's very important and help us to learn other languages and know about their cultures.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's very important and helps us to learn other languages and to know about their cultures.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, adding 'to' before 'know' improves parallelism in the sentence.