Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. For example, clarify the change in your movie-watching habits after moving to London and explain the reason more clearly. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I used to watch movies almost every day on my smartphone using apps like Netflix before I came to London. However, since arriving here, I rarely watch movies because some apps don't work with my SIM card.

提案: Your answer has some vocabulary mistakes and unclear expressions. For example, 'quite sweating' is incorrect. Try to use more appropriate adjectives and provide clearer reasons for your preferences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I usually enjoy watching science fiction movies like Star Wars. In particular, I prefer films directed by famous directors such as Spielberg and Kubrick because they create a captivating atmosphere.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct prepositions and articles, and improve sentence structure. Also, add linking words to contrast your past and present preferences clearly.

例: When I was a child, I preferred going to the cinema and sometimes went there with my brother and father, which was quite memorable. However, nowadays I usually watch movies on my smartphone using apps like Netflix.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer, using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I believe watching movies in a language different from one's mother tongue is very useful. For example, I often watch movies with English subtitles to improve my understanding of accents and sentence structure.

× But after I arrived in London, I really watched a movie because I can't use some apps because of the SIM card.

✓ But after I arrived in London, I rarely watched a movie because I couldn't use some apps due to the SIM card.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'really watched' instead of 'rarely watched' to express infrequency. Also, 'can't' should be in past tense 'couldn't' to match the past time frame. 'Because of' is acceptable but 'due to' is more formal here.

× I love the atmosphere because they are quite sweating.

✓ I love the atmosphere because they are quite suspenseful.

The word 'sweating' is incorrect in this context; the intended adjective is likely 'suspenseful' to describe the atmosphere of the movies.

× When I was a child I preferred going to cinema and sometimes went to there with my brother and a father, which was a quite memorable.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred going to the cinema and sometimes went there with my brother and father, which was quite memorable.

The phrase 'going to cinema' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Went to there' is incorrect; it should be 'went there'. 'A father' is incorrect; it should be 'father' without an article. 'A quite memorable' is incorrect; 'quite memorable' suffices.

× Yes, I believe watching movies with our language is a different from one's mother tongue is quite practical and beneficial.

✓ Yes, I believe watching movies in another language different from one's mother tongue is quite practical and beneficial.

The phrase 'with our language' is incorrect; it should be 'in another language'. The sentence structure is awkward and missing prepositions; adding 'in another language different from one's mother tongue' clarifies the meaning.

× For example, I sometimes watch movies with English subtitles on my smartphone so that I can understand the accent and how to compose English.

✓ For example, I sometimes watch movies with English subtitles on my smartphone so that I can understand the accent and how to construct English sentences.

The phrase 'how to compose English' is awkward; 'how to construct English sentences' is more natural and grammatically correct.