Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and contains some grammatical errors. Try to keep your response concise and grammatically correct by using proper verb forms and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

例: I usually watch movies on weekends with my family. We enjoy snacks and sometimes take photos, making the time fun and memorable.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same words. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your preferences.

例: I enjoy watching various movies, but I mostly prefer comedies on weekends because they are entertaining and make me laugh.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is somewhat unclear. Focus on using correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

例: I prefer watching movies at the cinema because the large screen and clear sound make the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains errors. Make sure to respond directly to the question without unnecessary phrases. Use complete sentences and explain why watching movies in other languages is useful, providing specific reasons.

例: Yes, watching movies in other languages like English or French helps improve language skills and fluency by exposing me to different vocabulary and accents.

× we really enjoy to watch these movies

✓ we really enjoy watching these movies

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the -ing form, not the infinitive 'to watch'. Therefore, 'enjoy watching' is correct.

× We eating snacks, click some photos as well as we enjoy these holidays with lot of fun

✓ We eat snacks, click some photos, and enjoy these holidays with a lot of fun

The phrase 'We eating snacks' is incorrect because the verb 'eat' should be in the base form or present simple tense here. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'and' improves clarity. 'Lot of fun' needs the article 'a' before 'lot'.

× There are many kinds of movies I watch

✓ There are many kinds of movies that I watch

The sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'that' to connect the clause properly. Adding 'that' clarifies the meaning.

× usually I mostly watch funny movies on weekends

✓ I usually watch funny movies on weekends

Using both 'usually' and 'mostly' together is redundant. Choosing one adverb of frequency is sufficient; 'usually' fits better here.

× funny movies are full of fun and I laugh when I watch these movies

✓ Funny movies are fun, and I laugh when I watch them

The phrase 'full of fun' is less natural than simply 'fun'. Also, 'these movies' can be replaced with 'them' for conciseness.

× I prefer to watch movies at cinemas

✓ I prefer to watch movies in cinemas

The correct preposition with 'cinemas' is 'in' rather than 'at' because it refers to being inside the cinema building.

× we watch movies in large screens and clearly sounds

✓ we watch movies on large screens and with clear sound

'Screens' should be preceded by 'on' not 'in'. 'Sounds' should be singular 'sound' and 'clearly' (an adverb) should be replaced with the adjective 'clear' to modify 'sound'.

× so we enjoy the movie very well as well as we enjoy

✓ so we enjoy the movie very much

The phrase 'very well as well as we enjoy' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'very much' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× He asked

This sentence is incomplete and irrelevant in the context; it should be removed or integrated properly.

× It is very useful to watch movies in other languages like English or French and our. English become fluent

✓ It is very useful to watch movies in other languages like English or French because it helps us become fluent in English

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'because it helps us become fluent in English' clarifies the purpose. Also, 'English become fluent' is incorrect; it should be 'we become fluent in English'.