Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại, làm cho câu trả lời không tự nhiên và thiếu mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh", "umm". Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I used to watch TV series a lot when I was a child. However, as I grew up, I rarely had free time to watch full movies. Nowadays, I often go to the cinema to watch movies.

提案: Bạn nên tránh nói lặp lại và sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh", "well" nhiều lần. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Ngoài ra, bạn nên hoàn chỉnh câu ví dụ để câu trả lời đầy đủ và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Most of my friends usually watch romantic movies because they enjoy love stories. However, I prefer horror movies because I like the thrilling and scary atmosphere they create. For example, I enjoy the suspense and excitement in these films.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều từ ngữ thừa, làm giảm tính tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh các từ ngữ như "uh", "umm". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có kết thúc rõ ràng và đầy đủ ý.

例: Due to my financial situation, I prefer watching movies at home. However, when I have enough money, I like to invite my friends to go to the cinema together.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "uhm", "uh" và nói câu hoàn chỉnh, rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc tốt với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp như "grammar" thay vì "grammars".

例: Absolutely yes. When I watch English TV series like Friends, I can learn many new words and improve my grammar skills.

× Well, when I was a child I watched TV a lot, especially TV series, but when I uh, however, as I grow up, I uh, did, I don't have uh, like free time to watch a full movies.

✓ Well, when I was a child I watched TV a lot, especially TV series, but as I grew up, I didn't have free time to watch full movies.

The verb tense should be consistent when referring to past events. 'Grow up' should be in past tense 'grew up' and 'did' should be followed by 'not have' to form the negative past tense 'didn't have'. Also, 'a full movies' is incorrect because 'movies' is plural and should not have 'a'.

× Well, when I was a child I watched TV a lot, especially TV series, but when I uh, however, as I grow up, I uh, did, I don't have uh, like free time to watch a full movies.

✓ Well, when I was a child I watched TV a lot, especially TV series, but as I grew up, I didn't have free time to watch full movies.

The phrase 'a full movies' is incorrect because 'movies' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. It should be 'full movies' without 'a'.

× Well, why most of my friends usually watch, uh, romantic movies because they love they like the love series uh, but However, I prefer watching horror movies because I like the thrilling and scary as much at atmosphere they create.

✓ Well, most of my friends usually watch romantic movies because they love the love series, but however, I prefer watching horror movies because I like the thrilling and scary atmosphere they create.

The phrase 'the thrilling and scary as much at atmosphere' is incorrect. 'Atmosphere' is singular and should not be preceded by 'as much at'. The correct phrase is 'the thrilling and scary atmosphere'.

× Uh, regarding to my financial, uh, ability, I would rather uh, watch a movie at home than go to the cinema.

✓ Uh, regarding my financial ability, I would rather watch a movie at home than go to the cinema.

The phrase 'regarding to' is incorrect. The correct preposition after 'regarding' is none; it should be 'regarding my financial ability'.

× Uh, regarding to my financial, uh, ability, I would rather uh, watch a movie at home than go to the cinema.

✓ Uh, regarding my financial ability, I would rather watch a movie at home than go to the cinema.

The phrase 'my financial' is incomplete. It should be 'my financial ability' to be grammatically correct.

× Umm, when I watch uh, some TV series like friends or umm, like English, uh, English, uh, TV series, I can uh, learn a lot of umm, a lot of new words and new grammars, umm.

✓ Umm, when I watch some TV series like Friends or English TV series, I can learn a lot of new words and new grammar.

The word 'grammars' is incorrect; 'grammar' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'Friends' as a TV series title should be capitalized.