Movies— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more concise and coherent by avoiding filler words and improving sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I often watch movies on weekends to relax. I usually use streaming services like Netflix, which help me stay connected with friends and family by watching the same films together.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetition and filler words. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually watch musical movies because they combine music and storytelling effectively. Additionally, I enjoy them as they remind me of what I learned about music in high school.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid filler words and improve sentence flow with linking words.

例: I prefer watching movies at home because it is more convenient. For example, I can cook or take a bath while watching, which helps me relax and enjoy my time.

提案: Your answer is generally good but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid awkward phrasing and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with article usage and plural forms.

例: I think watching movies in other languages is useful for language learners because it improves language skills and offers cultural insights. This helps learners gain a deeper understanding of different traditions and perspectives.

× I frequently watch movies, especially in the weekend as a way to unwind.

✓ I frequently watch movies, especially on the weekend as a way to unwind.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to 'the weekend'. The correct preposition is 'on' because we use 'on' for days and specific times like 'the weekend'.

× I usually use streaming service like Netflix and which is really useful to uh, stay to keep relationship with others like friends or families and which provides us good opportunity to do same.

✓ I usually use streaming services like Netflix, which are really useful to stay connected with others like friends or family and which provide us good opportunities to do the same.

The noun 'streaming service' should be plural 'streaming services' because it refers to a general category. 'Relationship' should be plural or uncountable as 'relationships' or 'connection'. 'Families' is better as 'family' in this context. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'services'. 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'us'.

× I usually watch a musical movies, which provides me, which gives me a lot of company, great combination of music and the prompt that actor said, uh, and also I learn about the music in the, when I was in high school.

✓ I usually watch musical movies, which provide me with a lot of company, a great combination of music and the prompts that actors say, and also I learned about music when I was in high school.

'A musical movies' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'movies' is plural; it should be 'musical movies'. 'Provides' should be 'provide' to agree with plural 'movies'. 'The prompt that actor said' should be plural 'prompts that actors say' for clarity and agreement. 'Learn' should be past tense 'learned' to match 'when I was in high school'.

× I usually watch a musical movies, which provides me, which gives me a lot of company, great combination of music and the prompt that actor said, uh, and also I learn about the music in the, when I was in high school.

✓ I usually watch musical movies, which provide me with a lot of company, a great combination of music and the prompts that actors say, and also I learned about music when I was in high school.

The phrase 'provides me' should be 'provide me with' because 'provide' is commonly followed by 'with' when indicating what is given. Also, 'learn about the music in the, when I was in high school' is awkward; removing 'the' and 'in the' clarifies the sentence.

× I prefer to watching the movie at home because it's because it's convenience.

✓ I prefer watching movies at home because it's convenient.

'Prefer to watching' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer watching' or 'prefer to watch'. 'The movie' should be plural 'movies' to match general preference. 'Because it's convenience' is incorrect; 'convenience' is a noun, but the adjective 'convenient' is needed here.

× Uh, I can enjoy moving, uh, watching movies with multiple tasks like doing cooking or taking bath as well which makes me relax and enjoyment as well.

✓ I can enjoy watching movies while doing multiple tasks like cooking or taking a bath, which helps me relax and enjoy myself.

'Enjoy moving' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy watching movies'. 'With multiple tasks' should be 'while doing multiple tasks' to indicate simultaneous actions. 'Doing cooking' should be 'cooking'. 'Taking bath' should be 'taking a bath'. 'Makes me relax and enjoyment' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me relax and enjoy myself'.

× I think it's useful to learn language for language learner because it provides not only for the chance enhancing language skills but also like the cultural experience or traditions which gives the learners a more deepened knowledge and perspective about the these culture.

✓ I think it's useful for language learners because it provides not only the chance to enhance language skills but also cultural experiences and traditions, which give learners a deeper knowledge and perspective about these cultures.

'Useful to learn language for language learner' is awkward; it should be 'useful for language learners'. 'Provides not only for the chance enhancing' should be 'provides not only the chance to enhance'. 'Like the cultural experience or traditions' should be 'cultural experiences and traditions'. 'Gives the learners' should be 'give learners' to agree with plural subject. 'More deepened' is incorrect; 'deeper' is correct. 'About the these culture' should be 'about these cultures'.