E-books— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 중복되고 어순, 단어 선택에서 오류가 있어 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제 문장으로 바로 답한 후, 이유를 1~2문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예: 'I'm used to reading paper books'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 'uncomfortable' 대신 왜 불편한지(눈의 피로, 형식 등)를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 또한 불필요한 반복('so so', 'I think')을 줄이세요.

例: I prefer paper books because I'm used to reading them and find them more comfortable. For example, paper books don't strain my eyes as much as screens, and I enjoy turning the pages, which helps me concentrate.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 있어 문장이 불명확합니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 먼저 말한 뒤, 구체적인 상황을 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 'I usually read online when...' 형태로 시작하고, 이메일, 뉴스, 짧은 블로그 등 구체적인 예를 주세요. 불필요한 반복과 망설임을 줄이세요.

例: I usually read online when I'm checking emails or browsing short news articles. For instance, I often read headlines and brief posts during breaks on my phone.

提案: 답변에 망설임과 모호한 표현이 많습니다. 명확한 주제 문장으로 'Yes, I will' 또는 'No, I won't'을 제시하고, 이유와 구체적인 예를 1~2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 'avoid that situation'처럼 불분명한 표현 대신 구체적으로 어떤 상황을 피하고 싶은지 쓰세요. 또한 'balance'에 대해 어떻게 실천할지 한 문장으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I will probably read more online because digital content is becoming more popular and convenient. However, I will try to balance it by reserving time each week for reading paper books to avoid eye strain.

提案: 내용이 반복되고 불명확한 단어 선택('you have to', 'in my own')가 있습니다. 구체적으로 어떤 종류의 기사(뉴스, 기술 기사, 블로그 등)를 읽는지 말하고, 이유를 연결어로 설명하세요. 예문에서는 명확한 카테고리와 빈도도 포함하세요.

例: I usually read news articles and technology blogs online because they are easy to access and updated frequently. For example, I check online newspapers every morning to keep up with current events.

提案: 비교 설명이 약하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 비교 질문에는 먼저 'Online reading is different because...'와 같이 차이점을 명확히 제시하고, 이어서 각각의 장단점을 구체적으로 대비해서 말하세요. 연결어(for example, on the other hand)를 사용해 논리적으로 구성하세요.

例: Online reading is different because it's faster and more convenient for searching information. For example, I can quickly look up facts on my phone, whereas paper books are better for in-depth reading and don't cause as much eye strain.

× Actually, I prefer to read paper books because I think I'm used to use, I'm used to reading a paper roof and I before I try to read some ebooks, but it's I think it's very uncomfortable.

✓ Actually, I prefer to read paper books because I think I'm used to reading paper books, and before I tried to read some e-books, I found it very uncomfortable.

'Used to' followed by a verb requires the -ing form (used to reading). 'Used to use' is incorrect. 'A paper roof' is likely a miswording for 'paper books'. Maintain past reference for the earlier attempts: use past tense 'tried'. Also simplify clauses and remove filler words to improve clarity.

× So so I want to keep reading by paper books.

✓ So I want to keep reading paper books.

The preposition 'by' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Use 'reading paper books' (no change in plurality needed). Remove duplicate 'so' for natural speech.

× When they usually read online, uh, for example when I checked my e-mail or when I found read the articles I I can read by online and.

✓ When I usually read online, for example when I check my e-mail or find articles, I can read them online.

Pronoun 'they' is incorrect; the speaker should use 'I'. Tense consistency: use present simple 'check' and 'find' for habitual actions. 'Read by online' is wrong; use 'read them online'. Removed fillers and duplicated words.

× If a little short article, I think it's it's.

✓ If it's a short article, I think it's fine.

Sentence fragment fixed by adding subject and verb ('it's a short article'). 'A little short article' is unnatural; use 'a short article'. Complete the thought with 'it's fine' to convey meaning.

× Hmm, I think this is umm, new trend these days, so I can avoid that umm situation.

✓ Hmm, I think this is a new trend these days, so I can adapt to that situation.

Add the article 'a' before 'new trend'. 'Avoid that situation' may not match intended meaning; 'adapt to' or 'avoid' depending—'adapt to that situation' fits better with reading more online. Use present tense 'is' for current trend.

× So I think yes, I umm, I will read more online in the future.

✓ So I think yes, I will read more online in the future.

Removed filler words and repetition for clarity. 'Will read' is the correct future tense here.

× So I think uh, making making balance is very important.

✓ So I think making a balance is very important.

Duplicate 'making' removed. Add article 'a' before 'balance' for correct noun phrase. Alternatively, 'maintaining a balance' would be more natural.

× I like to read some articles and information because I can easily find some articles, information by online, so you have to.

✓ I like to read articles and information because I can easily find them online.

Use 'online' without 'by'. Remove redundant 'some' and duplicate nouns. 'You have to' is incomplete and unclear; removed it to fix sentence structure.

× Mostly I read some yeah newspaper or in my own something like that.

✓ Mostly I read newspapers or things on my own like that.

'Newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' for general habit. 'In my own' is ungrammatical; use 'on my own' or 'on my phone' depending on meaning. Simplified filler words.

× Yes, I think it's quite different and reading online is we can research some information quickly and you can easily carry information to my cell phone.

✓ Yes, I think it's quite different: with online reading we can research information quickly, and you can easily carry information on my cell phone.

Original had mixed subjects and misplaced clauses. Reordered to 'with online reading we can...' 'Carry information to my cell phone' should be 'carry information on my cell phone' or 'save it to my phone'. Keep pronouns consistent.

× It it's advantage of reading online and paper reading paper I also have a lot of a lot of advantages.

✓ It's an advantage of reading online, and paper reading also has many advantages.

Fixed repetition and added article 'an' before 'advantage'. Rephrased second clause to 'paper reading also has many advantages' to be grammatical and clear.