Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please focus on correcting vocabulary errors and avoid redundancy. For example, use 'science' instead of 'Signs' and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural.

例: Yes, I really enjoyed studying science when I was in school. It was one of my favorite subjects, and I used to get good scores in it. Because of my interest, I chose to graduate in a science-related field.

提案: Try to use clearer linking words and avoid vague expressions like 'taken its route to Infinity'. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I use my science knowledge daily because science and technology are part of almost everything around us. For example, technology has advanced rapidly and made our lives much easier.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use correct terms like 'human body' instead of 'human signs'. Also, try to connect your ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: I am very interested in medicine, especially biology and the study of the human body. Because of this interest, I hope to become a doctor one day and help patients.

提案: Please work on grammar and vocabulary accuracy, such as 'people are' instead of 'someone are' and 'science' instead of 'signs'. Also, structure your answer clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'technologies, improvising'.

例: In my opinion, it depends on a person's interest. Some people like science, while others prefer different subjects. However, since technology is improving and making life easier, having some knowledge of science is beneficial.

提案: Avoid mixing religious references with scientific topics as it may confuse the listener. Also, improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I love watching science TV programs. When I was a child, I used to watch them with my father and really enjoyed learning how people develop new technologies to make life easier.

× It was one of my favorite subject.

✓ It was one of my favorite subjects.

The word 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' because it is preceded by 'one of my favorite', which requires a plural noun.

× I really love it.

✓ I really loved it.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was in school'), so the verb should be in the past tense to maintain consistency.

× Even I was very interested in it.

✓ I was very interested in it.

The word 'Even' is unnecessary and awkward here; removing it improves clarity and correctness.

× So I have taken my graduation in science subject only.

✓ So I have taken my graduation in science subjects only.

The noun 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' because 'science' encompasses multiple subjects.

× I do use science knowledge daily becauses in today's world everything is based on science and technology.

✓ I do use science knowledge daily because in today's world everything is based on science and technology.

The word 'becauses' is a misspelling; it should be 'because' to correctly express the reason.

× Today the technology has taken its route to Infinity, it has been used in almost everything and it has made the life of men easier.

✓ Today technology has taken its route to infinity; it is used in almost everything and has made people's lives easier.

'The technology' is incorrect; 'technology' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. Also, 'Infinity' should be lowercase 'infinity'. 'The life of men' is better expressed as 'people's lives' for naturalness.

× It was one of my favorite when I was in the school.

✓ It was one of my favorites when I was in school.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun 'favorites'. Also, 'in the school' should be 'in school' for natural usage.

× I'm very interested in biology and studying off the human signs.

✓ I'm very interested in biology and studying human signs.

The preposition 'off' is incorrect here; it should be omitted to correctly express the interest in studying human signs.

× It was one of my favorite.

✓ It was one of my favorites.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires the noun to be plural 'favorites'.

× I will become a doctor. One day and will try to help the patient.

✓ I will become a doctor one day and will try to help patients.

The sentence is fragmented; combining the two parts and correcting 'the patient' to 'patients' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Someone are interested in science, so someone are interested in some other subject.

✓ Some people are interested in science, so some people are interested in other subjects.

'Someone' is singular and cannot be used with 'are'. 'Some people' is plural and appropriate here. Also, 'some other subject' should be plural 'other subjects'.

× So yes, it is not very important to study signs.

✓ So yes, it is not very important to study science.

The word 'signs' is incorrect; it should be 'science' to match the context.

× But yes, in today's world, technologies, improvising and it is making the life of the men easier.

✓ But yes, in today's world, technology is improving and making people's lives easier.

The sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'Technologies, improvising' is incorrect; it should be 'technology is improving'. Also, 'the life of the men' is better expressed as 'people's lives'.

× It is so beautiful that how the men with the help of God is improvising in technology or Lord and making the life of a person easy.

✓ It is so beautiful how people, with the help of God or the Lord, are improving technology and making life easier for everyone.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Improvising in technology' should be 'improving technology'. Also, 'the men' is better as 'people', and 'making the life of a person easy' should be 'making life easier for everyone'.