Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'umm', and use correct vocabulary. For example, instead of 'sturdy fix it', say 'studying physics'. Also, explain why you like physics with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I enjoy studying science at school, especially physics. I find it fascinating because it helps me understand how things work, and I love solving physics problems.

提案: Your answer is confusing and repetitive. Try to give a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain when and how you use science knowledge in daily life.

例: Not every day, but sometimes I use my knowledge of physics and chemistry to solve everyday problems, like fixing things or understanding how appliances work.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid filler sounds like 'mmm'.

例: I would like to learn more about astronomy because I am curious about planets and stars.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, explain why basic science knowledge is important.

例: I don't think everyone needs to be a science expert, but basic science knowledge is important because it helps us solve everyday problems.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains filler words and some repetition. Try to speak more fluently and use varied vocabulary. Also, provide a clear reason why you like these programs.

例: Yes, I really enjoy watching science TV programs, especially those about astronomy. I find it fascinating to learn about the moon and Mars.

× Yes sure, I enjoy sturdy fix it, but not chemistry.

✓ Yes sure, I enjoy studying physics, but not chemistry.

The word 'sturdy' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'studying' which is the gerund form of the verb 'study' used as a noun. Also, 'fix it' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'physics'. The sentence should use 'studying physics' to express the activity enjoyed.

× I like physics because umm they have a lot of curiosity and I really love to solve the physics.

✓ I like physics because it has a lot of interesting concepts and I really love to solve physics problems.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect when referring to 'physics' which is singular and uncountable; 'it' should be used. Also, 'curiosity' is a noun that does not fit here; 'interesting concepts' or 'interesting questions' is more appropriate. 'Solve the physics' is incomplete; it should be 'solve physics problems'.

× No, I'm not scientist, so I'm not.

✓ No, I'm not a scientist, so I'm not.

The noun 'scientist' requires an article 'a' before it when singular and countable. Also, the phrase 'so I'm not' is incomplete; it would be better to say 'so I don't use it' or 'so I don't apply it'.

× I I really do in my daily life, but sometime, really, sometime, really sometime I use physics knowledge or chemical knowledge to solve the everyday problem, Yeah.

✓ I really do use it in my daily life, but sometimes I use physics or chemistry knowledge to solve everyday problems, yeah.

The sentence has repetition and incorrect adverb forms. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Chemical knowledge' is better as 'chemistry knowledge'. 'Everyday problem' should be plural 'everyday problems'.

× OK, I'm not very interested in science. MMM. Nowadays, but in Chinese. Who's but in but in China, so MMM.

✓ OK, I'm not very interested in science nowadays, especially in China.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas into a coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's no need to some, it's no need to everyone began science expert or know a lot of science knowledge.

✓ It's not necessary for everyone to become a science expert or to know a lot of scientific knowledge.

The phrase 'It's no need to some' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'It's not necessary for some'. Also, 'began science expert' is incorrect; it should be 'to become a science expert'. 'Science knowledge' is better expressed as 'scientific knowledge'.

× But I think umm, basic science concerns, concerns are important to know to solve our daily lives.

✓ But I think basic scientific concepts are important to know to solve problems in our daily lives.

The phrase 'basic science concerns, concerns' is repetitive and unclear. 'Scientific concepts' is a better phrase. Also, 'to solve our daily lives' is incorrect; it should be 'to solve problems in our daily lives'.

× Oh yeah, actually I really love watching the video, uh, telling about astronomy, like like what was in the moon? What's in what's in the Mars? Like this topic.

✓ Oh yeah, actually I really love watching videos about astronomy, like what is on the moon, what's on Mars, and topics like that.

'The video' should be plural 'videos' if referring generally. 'Telling about astronomy' is incorrect; 'videos about astronomy' is better. 'What was in the moon?' should be 'what is on the moon?' since the moon still exists. 'What's in what's in the Mars?' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'what's on Mars'.